Inquiry

What say you, my feline friend?
Yeah you over there with the toothy grin.
Hanging on the wall with your swinging tail,
Counting down the moments until I cease to exhale.

Author's Note

Feel free to review. I respect and appreciate criticism, positive or negative.

Reviews

[w]

I hate those damn cat clocks, the eyes follow me everywhere. Good piece.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Me too man. Creepy at the very least. Thanks.

[Marissa]

I like it and it's shortness.

[Laura Maidah]

No complaints. nice.

[Lunny]

uhm. it's short, obviously but to me it sounds like few sentences from a movie dialogue or something...

[Laura Maidah]

It's supposed to be short.

[Laura Maidah]

Just in case that was an issue for you.

[Rhea752]

so few words brought great imagery to my mind. amazingly done. :)

[kayla]

I like this. You're lucky that you can just write four lines, and it turn out amazing :P

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Sometimes it seems hit or miss lol. Thank you though :)

[Celestial Witch Child]

Cute and sly, yet eerie and a little disturbing. Wow. Something so unique and new in only four lines. Great piece. (:

[Alrick]

hmm, very interesting. I love it! No criticism at all except for this is a great work! I love the rhyming and the clear picture the reader can get of the scenario just by the little you've written here. Perfect.