Piece of Mind

Piece of Mind

A Poem by Jordan A. Wilson

To fall upon an ear

To race past an eye

To spend your time well

One can only try

 

Peace is what some want

To this they build their shrines

I, however, let the carbon flow

For a little piece of mind

© 2012 Jordan A. Wilson


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Jordan A. Wilson
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Peace of mind? Piece? A piece of the mind? or peace? I don't get "a little piece of mind. Please enlighten me, friend. I get that you used "piece" twice. It must be purposed. What does that add to your subject matter and theme as a whole. Very theoretical, conceptual, and abstract, to say the least. Mood is very nonconcrete, which I don't really like for such a short thing. It's very detached, which does work here. It rarely works for me in something so small and neat. It's recondite and pretty obscure. Iono....

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jordan A. Wilson

8 Years Ago

piece of mind is a play off of the well known phrase peace of mind. this one describes one of the re.. read more
Laura Maidah

8 Years Ago

THAnks for the clarification. I googled it. Really learned a lot from you today.
nicely written!! good job!! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I enjoyed this poem(:

Posted 8 Years Ago


I love your unique twist on such a cliché phrase. Great work.

For me, writing is what gives me peace of mind.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 13, 2012
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Jordan A. Wilson
Jordan A. Wilson

Carrollton, KY



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I'm a 22 year old Entrepreneurship Student of Northern Kentucky University from the small town of Carrollton, Ky. I play guitar and began writing poetry as a hobby four years ago. My main goals in wri.. more..

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