Once in a Blue Moon

As I stand entranced by a moon lit in full

My heart sings the lonely wolf’s song

It’s howling like a cool breeze, “Why must you tempt me so?”

I can feel my eyes dilate and the fire within swell

 

Luminous in beauty, unprecedented in appeal

I am drawn to its glow

A mere moth lulled by the effervescent aura of a lunar beauty

Its appearances are few and far between,

Making a seconds’ glance a sight for sore eyes

 

Every season millions find themselves under the spell,

Lying on a never-ceasing whim

To see the Blue Moon

Reviews

[Lindsay T]

This is pretty good. You have a really, really nice way of expressing yourself and your descriptions are always well-written.

My only suggestion: Some of the descriptions would be more suitable for a novel. What I mean by that, is that having several tough vocab words in one sentence can be sometimes overwhelming.

I.e...
"A mere mouth lulled by the effervescent aura of a lunar beauty."
This is nicely written, but it's a few too many words for me to swallow at one time. I would try something like "A mere mouth lulled by the lunar beauty" instead. It's just a bit easier for readers.

A metaphor for this is having a salt shaker. Each grain of salt is a tough word (effervescent, lulled, lunar, aura) and instead of pouring all the salt, you sprinkle the salt throughout the entire poem.

Good job nonetheless, I really like your style!