A Day At The Mecca

A Day At The Mecca

A Poem by Jordan A. Wilson

At The Mecca

It’s not reckless

There’s no restless

For a quest let’s

Ride on the wind

Share a few grins

Venture through the sky

And get high

On the warm sunlight

Here there’s never night

Vibes are just right

When we’re together

I can’t see nothing better

I’ll write 1000 letters

So at The Mecca

I wish to never leave

I truly do believe

Right at the start

I healed a lonely heart

I hope to never part

From The Mecca

© 2012 Jordan A. Wilson


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It is upbeat and I like the scattered rhyme. I think it has more impact if you end it at 'I healed a lonely heart'. There are different places called Mecca or The Mecca, and I don't know which you are writing about specifically, but it is symbolic of a place of pilgrimage. It seems fitting that you would heal a lonely heart on the way. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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i love the rhyming going on, and how irregular from the norm the poem is, i approve greatly of this. you have a unique style that grabs my attention quite efficiently and powerfully. I never fail to enjoy reading your pieces

Posted 8 Years Ago


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this is such a happy poem and often i don't like happy poems but i like this one. great poem keep writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


not sure what the mecca is but i like the way the poem is

Posted 8 Years Ago


the mecca, the temple, or significant place of being, this poem has a flight of
meditation feeling combined with a celebratory sense of the now, excellent.

Posted 8 Years Ago


It is upbeat and I like the scattered rhyme. I think it has more impact if you end it at 'I healed a lonely heart'. There are different places called Mecca or The Mecca, and I don't know which you are writing about specifically, but it is symbolic of a place of pilgrimage. It seems fitting that you would heal a lonely heart on the way. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this. It's upbeat, positive, and well-written(:

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is very fast. Do you leave out punctuation on purpose? I often do. There is a joy in this piece and that is infectious, good read but I believe it could benefit from punctuation. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I feel the flow is a bit off here. Could just be me though.

Posted 8 Years Ago


amazing ...another good poem

Posted 8 Years Ago


reading this felt like a K'naan lyric oscillating in a handsome grace...good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Jordan A. Wilson
Jordan A. Wilson

Carrollton, KY



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I'm a 22 year old Entrepreneurship Student of Northern Kentucky University from the small town of Carrollton, Ky. I play guitar and began writing poetry as a hobby four years ago. My main goals in wri.. more..

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