Spear Heading The Ugly

To all those who have suffered cruelty by someone else's hand. Redemption is coming.

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Pierce my heart? Naaaah, That dumb thing left long ago

All that's left is a rotting hole

 

Killed or raped you don't care

All I can do is vacantly stare

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Wont be happy until i am dead

Who will you dehumanise in my stead

 

S**t, w***e...what the f**k did I do?

Im guilty of nothing but being bound to you

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

 

Keep on pushing me until Im heavy as lead

Go...Be king in your demon filled head

 

Punishing me does it make you feel like a man

I care not where it all began

 

Gods got me and the devils got you...One of these days he will be coming for you

 

Ugly...the words you say

thrown like daggers with shrapnel spray

Reviews

[Z.A. Cox]

I love emotion in poems/lyrics whether it be positive or negative as long as you can feel it when you read/listen/see it. I don't know if this is a complement or not but from me it is... it reminds me of something the vocalist from Lamb Of God would write (Randy Blyth). I like it!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thank you so much...l was certainly under the spell of some strong feelings when I wrote this. Glad to know that it transcends to the reader!

[Relic]

We take others for granted when-as they say- familiarity breeds contempt.

This has strong emotions attached.

Good one.

[A. Amos]

Simply splendid and honest write, adore your work in this one...thanks for sharing

[The Nude Writer]

Strong and powerful poem. Love the message in the end :) Hey ugly minded people.. go to hell ;) Love it!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Its amazing what transcends in your writing when you are battling emotional situations in your life. Thanks for the review and support!

[The Nude Writer]

:)

[Writer *78*]

impressive two of your stanzas remind me of max the boy king from where the wild things are and romeo n juliet when mercutio (if i spelled the name right) says to benvolio 'by thy heel i care not' feel free to review any of my work if you wish.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thsnk you for the review and i am very flattered my work reminds you of two such enjoyable pieces of literature...I will be glad to review your work first chance I get :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

BitB, you've cut me deep. I'm not here to judge. That's not my purpose this time around. I'm here... to be redundant, to point out the obvious, to make lite of the serious and frown upon the lack of compassion that must yet still exist. Perhaps it is a bit of all of this that keeps "us" in those dark places, in those shadows where our hearts, our souls shrivel and die or at least seem to. Are the heart and soul connected? I don't know. They're both as abstract at times as those thrown daggers and shrapnel spray are real. The one thing we can take away from this with any certainty is that we do not, cannot know the purpose, if such exists, for these events that riddle our lives with incomprehensible dichotomies. Hate, sorrow, remorse... affirmation, hope, love. It's a delicate balance of interaction, of understanding, of assimilation. We experience; hopefully we learn and grow just enough to move on to something better... for everyone.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thank you for taking the time to review my work and give such a well thought out reviews. To say it simply...Its nice to be gotten...understood...to see your work resonate with the reader and even better yet a fellow writer.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

...and I appreciate a fellow writer that has something to say and can say it in such a way this mere mortal has a chance of understanding, learning and growing because of it. Do you have a human name (alias, etc.) or shall I just refer to you as friend BitB forever more? ;-)

[Bats In The Belfry]

LOL you can call me Sherri and you?

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Well, that's more like it! :D ...and you may call me Ufi.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Well hello there Ufi...welcome to my world XD

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Pleased to read you, Sherri! Thank you for the warm welcome and excellent reading material. Do you perchance have a nibble of cheese and thimble of wine for this little book mouse? ^_^

[Bats In The Belfry]

idk the last time I had a pet mouse it died...lol

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

{sigh} ... we don't live so long as we could/should but merely as long as is necessary; so it seems.

[Bats In The Belfry]

we can live as long as our imagination is willing to keep us : )

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Well, THAT proves you're a writer!! XD

[Bats In The Belfry]

Hahaaaa and to think II haven't sold a word yet...silly publishers!!!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Just out of curiosity, how much do you ask for a word?

[BL]

Very powerful and written with feeling, I think. Nicely presented statement, gods and devils is good, thanks for sharing...

[Bats In The Belfry]

thank you...I write best when emotion has a grip on me...im sure most writers will say the same..lol

[ewest1220]

This has a lot of power in it's lines. Usually this rhyme scheme creates a singsong atmosphere and I'm delighted to see a different voice behind this work. Very dark and driven great job!

[Bats In The Belfry]

Thanks I enjoyed reading your review...I rather like the dark

[ewest1220]

As do I

[Bats In The Belfry]

More passion in the dark

[ewest1220]

Agreed

[Bats In The Belfry]

:) to the dark then

[Dr. Wood ?]

wow..Direct as a poisoned arrow.....Great title....terrific chorus...Another that could be set to music and chill all who listen

[Bats In The Belfry]

thank you for your enthusiastic and descriptive review!!!!

[Revery]

Oh wow, this is strong. It is so well written with incredible poetic style. So intense, you did a great job with this. The passion is powerful, and I'm sure the emotion just poured out but the structure is to be commended on it's own merit.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Wow...thank you! I'm humbly honored by your critique and most grateful!