FRONTIER ILLUSION

wrote for a contest

 

FRONTIER ILLUSION

 

Painful are frontiers

As they need to be modified

Restructured constantly

I feel insecure..

 

One day I say..

“Up to this is my frontier

Now I can rest..

Finally I am settled”.

 

Next morning sun comes..

With the news of my broken fences

I begin a new search

For the new frontier of my territory

 

Towards the evening…

I am too tired to accept that ..

Frontiers are only illusions…

That existed only in my greed

 

I regret my lost days.

I regret my lost years

Which fool told about,

A never existed frontier …

 

I am not the owner of my house

I am not the owner of my life

I am not the owner of their life

How can I erect frontiers,

For a territory owned by none..

 

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

I'm having trouble with the idea of the word "frontier". Every time I read the poem, I want to see "wall" or "fence" or something like that for some odd reason. I have problems with poems written for contests. They can sometimes be forced and not totally thought all the way through. I like the poem and I do get what it's about, but often it's not too clear.

[Richard Williams]

A good thought-provoking subjective assessment of frontiers.

[Huggy Bear]

Very lovely piece you have:)

[Dream Weaver]

A very perceptive write...in reality
we all own nothing except our souls
and some of us not even that...

[dovetailer]

You don't erect frontiers...they're the promise of what lies beyond our reach at this moment...like dreams...aspirations...the land calling to us from beyond the horizon...We cannot see it, but we know it's there...our tomorrow...
You may not own your home, but you do own your life...and the fruit, or lack of fruit, of it...
Keep reaching...be fruitful...

[The Analog Kid]

Frontiers. Nice metaphor and well-done..

[Buddhistboy73]

Like the imagery in this piece, the use of frontiers lends it a real physical image, even though the barriers are mental. I especially enjoyed the final stanza...."How can I erect......a territory owned by none"...great!
Only slight criticism (constructive I hope) is that the line "Which fool told about" seems to break the flow of this poem somehow.
Otherwise I really liked your writing here.,..

[Ruth]

Always a lesson to learn, always a test to pass! Life ey? lol
A beautiful poem love, great message! xx

[David W Moore III]

fantastic metaphor, and you play it well

[Angel Veselinov]

really loved the message in it :) No frontiers is the key of success and spiritual enlightenment. Thanks for sharing this unique piece with us :)