The rusty nail

An old nail driven long ago

into solid wood

once strong with a glow

rains of corrosion it's withstood

Rusted and bent

at birth shiny

Its usefulness spent

blistered rough, shrunken tiny

It held a house in place

Some torn by its protrusion

In age found a disgrace

Holding things together by intrusion

Worn fragile its head

It you can not yank

Hammered down till dead

Burried in a hardened plank

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

am I this nail? held together by intrusion...
I have eroded but am still holding on...
the rust has not stopped me yet.
Maybe a little WD40 would be welcomed.
j.

[Soren]

No Jacob when writting this poem I thought of how many parrents become a burden to children as they grow old and an intrusion if taken into the home. Thanks so much Jacob for the read and comment it is always so welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I understand this concept very much.

[Betty Hermelee]

a great metaphor, which is not only about a rusty nail…. over time that helped to build a house, not decrepit, worn, just liked those who came and wen, intruders, and all others, some of disgrace that had passed through or lived in this house…. the fact is the rusty nail is still there…” Buried in a hardened plank” and still holding the house erect…. a house full of mixed emotions thst me live on eternally……
nice write Soren
warmly, B🌷

[Soren]

Thank you so much Betty I appreciate very much your review and interpretation.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Soren
Warmly, B

[Ken Simm.]

A very pointed metaphor. Excellent.

[Soren]

Got your point Ken and thank you for the read. Appreciate the support

[Franky]

I like this! Very original and imaginative. Unique thoughts.

[Soren]

Thank you Franky for the review and most kind words they are deeply valued

[Marie]

Wow! What excellent use of metaphor in every line of this sublimely penned poem. I wonder if we are not all nails in the timber of life, Soren? I love how you depict the different stages of life and the changes within each stage. Sublime inking! Thank you for sharing, Soren...

[Soren]

Thank you so much Marie your supportive words are always so appreciated.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Soren...