when its dark

These a few words to express your basic instincts, deep transparency.

I'd give you the stars.
But enjoy when its dark.
For you!
I'm not a shadow fallen,
Shallow dream with filthy rotten,
Finally hell, when waiting to come,
and then my devil will smother your sun.
Can't skip a beat, but its your scared heart
Fear the joy when its dark. . .

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

I can sense that you are trying to impart something very deep and special about the darkness, but I think it might be just missing the mark -- some of the language is a little vague. Also, did you perhaps mean "smother" instead of "smoother" in line 7? Nice work!