One Love

There we lay

Our faces to the sky

Hand in hand

Watching the clouds go by

 

Here I am

In awe and total bliss

A wonderful feeling

Wanting to stay just like this

 

Your arms wrapped around me

Puts my mind at ease

Your strength and love

Set my heart free

 

Your heart beat soothes me

Why you love me is a mystery

My friends were jealous and the tell me

"Babe you are so lucky"

 

I've never felt like thing about anyone ever

Theres a love so strong that nothing can break

It withstands everthing

Something a sword cant even sever

Reviews

[xxCrashingxx]

i really like this one =]

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This poem started very nicely, you show talent and painted a nice visual. You have a few typos I think in the las few lines that kind of threw me off. All in all it's a good piece and shows a lot of talent.