Abiding

Abiding

A Poem by spacelava
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ABIDING adjective ▪ /əˈbʌɪd/ (of a feeling or memory) lasting a long time; enduring.

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Veins once filled with blood run hollow

Empty beats, a heart so shallow

There’s a void inside my chest;

Guess you can figure out the rest


You - the missing part of me

Brain stained with memories

Silent notes of what we were

Lovers then, now enemies


In this game of love and war,

I became a warrior

I want to go back to how we were

One drink; One bottle 

Will it erase it all? 


But the magic is over now that I’m sober

Images keeps flashing from last October

My heart’s black and blue 

All cause of you 


You broke it - yes you!

Now it has no use


I don’t wanna fight no more

There’s only tragedy in love and war

I don’t wanna fight

I don’t wanna fight

You are oh so cold. 



© 2021 spacelava


Author's Note

spacelava
I'm not exactly a poet. I do like to write lyrics for songs no one will sing or listen to. It's something I've been doing ever since I was a child. I started writing this when I was nineteen. It had several changes over the years, but now I'm finally ready to say that it has been finished.

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Wow, you put so much time, work, and effort into this beautiful song ❤️ I have to say, I love love love it!! I actually read it then realized that you wrote it as lyrics and I came up with a little tune for it and sang and recorded it. Lol, I really like the song!! 100/100!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much! 🥺♥ It's a song I hold very dear to my heart and it makes me very happy readi.. read more



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I'd veer away from the poem first... If you write songs, perhaps you have a YouTube channel or something? I'd love for you to have a melody for this if you haven't already. Give us a heads-up when you do. Drop a link perhaps? Thanks.

Now back to the poem "One drink; One bottle Will it erase it all? " ---> this line would make for a catchy refrain, I believe. And since you've quoted Bob Dylan in your bio, you could perhaps make the other verses something like what he did with "It's Alright, Ma (I'm Only Bleeding)." You could make "One drink; One bottle Will it erase it all?" the repeated line for the different verses.

Whatever you choose to do, happy writing!

Posted 4 Days Ago


spacelava

4 Days Ago

Haha, I don't have a YouTube channel or a musical bone in my body. I just like writing songs because.. read more
Oydrin

3 Days Ago

Alright. Happy writing then!
And no, that doesn't make you a poser.

Here's to .. read more
One drink; One bottle
Will it erase it all?

Yes, but it will be hell to pay come morning....
Enjoyable read, but I like how you get your fill.
wonderful writing

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

5 Days Ago

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :3
I enjoyed the poem. Had the feel of a drinking and escaping song.
"In this game of love and war,
I became a warrior
I want to go back to how we were
One drink; One bottle
Will it erase it all?"
The above lines. Damn good and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

1 Week Ago

You're far too kind 🥺 Thank you so so much, it really means the world
I'm not a poet either. But this sounds good! A sad one here. But I think you have skills no doubt.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

1 Week Ago

Thank you very much Frankie! I really appreciate your kind words and feedback!
This might be lyrics for a song, but it is totally believable for a poem.... it's really great.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much! Your kind words mean a lot!
light and ashes

1 Week Ago

You're welcome :) you deserve it. This is really awesome.
Wow, you put so much time, work, and effort into this beautiful song ❤️ I have to say, I love love love it!! I actually read it then realized that you wrote it as lyrics and I came up with a little tune for it and sang and recorded it. Lol, I really like the song!! 100/100!!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

spacelava

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much! 🥺♥ It's a song I hold very dear to my heart and it makes me very happy readi.. read more

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Added on January 12, 2021
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Tags: heartbreak, yearning, lost love

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