Abiding

ABIDING adjective ▪ /əˈbʌɪd/ (of a feeling or memory) lasting a long time; enduring.

Veins once filled with blood run hollow

Empty beats, a heart so shallow

There’s a void inside my chest;

Guess you can figure out the rest

You - the missing part of me

Brain stained with memories

Silent notes of what we were

Lovers then, now enemies

In this game of love and war,

I became a warrior

I want to go back to how we were

One drink; One bottle 

Will it erase it all? 

But the magic is over now that I’m sober

Images keeps flashing from last October

My heart’s black and blue 

All cause of you 

You broke it - yes you!

Now it has no use

I don’t wanna fight no more

There’s only tragedy in love and war

I don’t wanna fight

I don’t wanna fight

You are oh so cold. 

Author's Note

I'm not exactly a poet. I do like to write lyrics for songs no one will sing or listen to. It's something I've been doing ever since I was a child. I started writing this when I was nineteen. It had several changes over the years, but now I'm finally ready to say that it has been finished.

Reviews

[Nix is typing...]

Wow, you put so much time, work, and effort into this beautiful song ❤️ I have to say, I love love love it!! I actually read it then realized that you wrote it as lyrics and I came up with a little tune for it and sang and recorded it. Lol, I really like the song!! 100/100!!

[spacelava]

Thank you so much! 🥺♥ It's a song I hold very dear to my heart and it makes me very happy reading that you enjoyed it! + Omg! Hopefully I'll be able to hear it one day!!!

[Oydrin]

I'd veer away from the poem first... If you write songs, perhaps you have a YouTube channel or something? I'd love for you to have a melody for this if you haven't already. Give us a heads-up when you do. Drop a link perhaps? Thanks.

Now back to the poem "One drink; One bottle Will it erase it all? " ---> this line would make for a catchy refrain, I believe. And since you've quoted Bob Dylan in your bio, you could perhaps make the other verses something like what he did with "It's Alright, Ma (I'm Only Bleeding)." You could make "One drink; One bottle Will it erase it all?" the repeated line for the different verses.

Whatever you choose to do, happy writing!

[spacelava]

Haha, I don't have a YouTube channel or a musical bone in my body. I just like writing songs because it's fun!

I know this is going to make me look like a poser but not a Bob Dylan fan. I've never heard any of his songs actually. I found the quote quite randomly and strongly resonated with it, hence why I've put it in my bio.

Thanks for the feedback, but I think I'll leave my work as it is.

[Oydrin]

Alright. Happy writing then!
And no, that doesn't make you a poser.

Here's to more poems! :)

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

One drink; One bottle
Will it erase it all?

Yes, but it will be hell to pay come morning....
Enjoyable read, but I like how you get your fill.
wonderful writing

[spacelava]

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :3

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Had the feel of a drinking and escaping song.
"In this game of love and war,
I became a warrior
I want to go back to how we were
One drink; One bottle
Will it erase it all?"
The above lines. Damn good and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[spacelava]

You're far too kind 🥺 Thank you so so much, it really means the world

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your work and you are welcome.

[Franky]

I'm not a poet either. But this sounds good! A sad one here. But I think you have skills no doubt.

[spacelava]

Thank you very much Frankie! I really appreciate your kind words and feedback!

[light and ashes]

This might be lyrics for a song, but it is totally believable for a poem.... it's really great.

[spacelava]

Thank you so much! Your kind words mean a lot!

[light and ashes]

You're welcome :) you deserve it. This is really awesome.