I Promised Myself

Another poem by Speechless.

I promised myself I would not cry

When I found out you left me.

I promised myself I would not cry

But you still held the knife.

I promised myself I would not cry

When hands of time passed me by.

I promised myself I would not cry

But the weight hangs on my shoulders like lead.

I promised myself I would not cry

But it hurts too much to stop the pain.

I promised myself I would not cry

But I left and you left and we both left each other.

I promised myself I would not cry

When bloody tears of pain washed down my face.

I promised myself I would not cry

But the songs are like nightmares in my head.

I promised myself I would not cry

When burning words sear the page.

I promised myself I would not cry

But I drink from a pool of vanity.

I promised myself I would not cry

But the river of tears fills the world.

I promised myself I would not cry

But sorrows fall like rain.

I promised myself I would not cry

But I heard the silent song of the nightingale.

I promised myself I would not cry

But my tears fell anyway.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Bloody_Stars]

Wow. awesome write and so sad. but def good :)

[Elaine]

Awesome. My favorite is "When hands of time passed me by.

I promised myself I would not cry

But the weight hangs on my shoulders like lead."
It's really good and deep awesome write!

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

There's too much repetition, and the supposed consistency of the line is overwhelming. However I commend your poem's context.

Thanks for sharing,
Alex

[Mistaken]

I agree..the last two lines are my favorite :) and love your pic btw... this piece is beautiful

[Senseless whatever]

Very good write overall. I like the message and the imagery used. Felt that starting the second lines with 'but' got distracting, probably me because the lead ins (I promised myself I would not cry) didn't bother me.

Really nice poem. This is sweet and toughing, I can relate.

[youngteen]

wow that was beautiful

[GrownUpTime]

rlly good. i liked the last two lines the best.