Lost Forever

Another poem by Speechless.

A burning tongue, a lonely soul
A written blank ad a vain sneer
Helpless, burdened until everything leaves
The soft rustling of rivers
She lies in darkness
Soft fingers stroke her cheeks
Leaves rustle around her
The river flows around her body
Suffocating, but provoking
Daring her to cross
The deep depths into darkness.
The bloody forest of tears and pain
The water tingles
She must forfeit her life.
The rose thorns pull nastily at her skin--
As they pull her down,
Her mask reveals.
She falls into the deep abyss
Of lonesome scars that mark her soul.
Forever lost
Into the death river
Helpless, falling
With no one to catch her
Lost forever.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Terra]

Amazing! Your really great Speechless Shadow!

[Bloody_Stars]

It is very sad. i just want to reach out and save her. awesome write :)

[K. Carver]

It's so sad. I feel the pain. Very well done.

[Elaine]

Wow this reminds me of a book i read called "Green" it was very very good and i read it more then once. Great job.

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Mystically dark. There is lust in solemnity.

My favorite lines:
She falls into the deep abyss
Of lonesome scars that mark her soul.
Forever lost
Into the death river

Comment:
A written blank ad (perhaps this is 'and') a vain sneer

Good write. Thanks for sharing!
Alex

[Senseless whatever]

Great poem/ story. the imagery is great.

Wow this is a really great poem. The pictures you paint are extraordinary.

[Emily]

I like the design of this piece and how well it flows through the whole story. It seems a little like a nightmare, feeling as though you are falling down and drowning in an attempt to reveal that there is a true person underneath the mask -- the irony is that even though underneath the mask is revealed it is too late to save the 'soul' of the person. Well done, and a wonderful story told!

[Kristen]

Love the diction and flow of this piece, great write!