Cruel Vilification

This acrostic poem delves into the quote "Cold-seeming people once cared too much" and addresses the agony behind the dispassionate exterior.

“Cold-seeming people once cared too much”

Reality to adages.

Under stone veiled dwells a dark past

Every cold heart hides torture and heartbreak

Love can be merciless.

 

Violent surge of memories, too far yet too near. History's cruelest repetition. 

It only took a few choice sentences. They didn’t have to be true.

Loss drowns her in a tidal wave. No rescue to be had. Heart breaks on the rocks below.

In reality, nobody’s there to listen, to care, to hug, to believe her.

Friends to judges, acquaintances to jurors, happy memories to executioners. Exoneration not to be had.

“It’s okay. She’s really had it coming. She deserves all she gets. She’s not a good person.”

Consequences. Manipulation. People judge only by the surface and she lost the game.

Abject humiliation’s the  name of the game. Undeserved yet deserved.

“Twice fooled, shame on me”

In time to become exactly what she’s been made

Once the fraying thread of faith gives way

Never again to hope. Never again to love. Never again to trust. Never again to care.

Author's Note

I extremely rarely write poetry and am hardly talented at it- prose is much more my forte, but my muse called this necessary and impulse said take a risk and do something different. Also, I acknowledge that the variants of the quote in line one are "Heartless people once cared too much" and "Cold-hearted people once cared too much."

Reviews

[Subversive Reality]

I like this, really spoke to me, a denouncement the judgemental mentality that pervades people and society so much these days.

"Friends to judges, acquaintances to jurors, happy memories to executioners" - wow.. Words can't describe how awesome that line is

"I extremely rarely write poetry and am hardly talented at it" - also wow :-)

Well done!

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Thank you! Yes, people do get extremely judgmental in this day and age- and many judgments passed develop into self-fulfilling prophecies because of the pain wrought by the judgment.

[Prritiy]

Every cold heart hides torture and heartbreak
Love can be merciless.

its true love, in any form and relation, is a gift and he loss rather betrayal in this can lead to some people becoming seemingly heartless.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Most definitely, because those people do not want to be hurt so badly again.

[Prritiy]

true :)...

[StoryTellerWriter]

angry nice poem. me like it. new here, who the writer to follow here

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Welcome to the Cafe! I'm relatively new here too. My friend Melanie Genevieve writes a lot of good poetry, you should check her out! What kinds of stories do you like otherwise?

[Sami Khalil]

"Loss drowns her in a tidal wave. No rescue to be had. Heart breaks on the rocks below.

In reality, nobody’s there to listen, to care, to hug, to believe her.

Friends to judges, acquaintances to jurors, happy memories to executioners. Exoneration not to be had."
Thank you for sharing this good poem...:)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

You're welcome! I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Rose Kavanagh]

By itself, this poem is wonderful - passionate and heartfelt - but the fact that it is a subtle acrostic of its title adds another layer of depth to the piece, as well as the repetition of "Never again" in the final line. Lovely work, and if poetry isn't your forte, I can't imagine how fantastic your prose must be! *Off to read more of your writing*

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Wow! Thank you so much, I'm really glad that this poem appealed to you! I guess it's true that poetry should be written straight from the heart!

[bookworm0812]

Since you reviewed something of mine, I think it's only fair I review something of yours. This poem was edgy, captivating, and impeccably well written.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Aww, wow, thank you so much for the kind review! I'm glad you liked it (=

[bookworm0812]

:) It was impossible not to like!

[Melanie Genevieve]

This is a really cool acrostic :O I love how you did it so that it feels so organic. This makes me really sad and it's insane the idea behind this. The impact we have on one another as human beings is so intense. This makes me sad :(

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Thanks so much for the review! It is, indeed, impressive just how strongly one thoughtless action- or lack there of- can profoundly affect another person and change their outlook on the world for the worse forever.

[endo rush]

i don't write much poetry too. tried it out in this site only. many nice poets on this site, though. i'm beginning to like poetry, though I'm more comfortable with telling stories. :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Yeah, same, though I am starting to get random poetry inspiration out of nowhere!

[zainul]

This is a nice acrostic.
Quite descriptive and self explanatory.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Thank you so much! [=

[zainul]

You are most welcome.:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this necessary impulse is quite the impactful write...

she is judged, diminished and in ruins...because people don't realize how they can hurt others...

the victim of love ephemeral...innocence tarnished...that idealistic attitude crushed...

i had that in the 60's but enough negativity in life can make us quite saddened and cynical.

and that trust just doesn't reappear...

a really good acrostic...i am not a fan of form...but when it is done this well ( i never even noticed the acrostics until after i read your blurb) it was so natural it snuck up on me.

insightful write.

jacob

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Thank you for your comment! I am glad I managed to pull off such a natural acrostic that one does not notice until they either discern the first letter of either line or read my blurb! Indeed, negativity in life does have a profound impact, particularly when you are a reserved and introspective person who is pitted against someone that tends to be much more vocal about a struggling relationship than yourself. It is difficult to trust after people you've known for years turn against you without bothering to get your side of the story.