[untitled]

When you're here, I wanna be gone.

I don't wanna sit and watch you,

Wishing I was some where else.

 

 

When you speak, It make's me wanna run.

I just gotta get away,

As far away as I can get,

From you.

 

Don't you see?

Things aren't what they seem to be,

I'm not who you think I am.

I pretend,

And you believe I can,

Give you what you want from me.

 

When you're near, I wanna be far.

I don't wanna feel your touch,

Dreaming you were someone else.

 

When you lie, it makes me want to scream.

I just want to end the game,

Stop this fight and walk away,

From you.

 

Don't you see?

Things aren't what they seem to be,

I'm not who you think I am.

I pretend,

And you believe I can;

Give you what you want from me,

 

But I can't.

Reviews

[Lynn Mariposa]

I like the chemistry within this poem--it's very gritty, and to me felt like someone fighting to break free from a bad relationship. Sometimes the chemistry between a person is more friction than love, and you did a great job of bringing another dimension to relationships. Just curious--what kind of music do you write lyrics for? To me, this reminds me alot of a Lisa Loeb ballad??

[Danielle]

Very Nice!

[Tomás Ó C..]

A poem without a title is like a child without a name: you can call it whatever you want, but no two people will call it the same thing. Any suggestions from other readers?

[Berenice]

i like this a lot, i feel this way so many times a day. like your sick of having to pretend that you like/love someone. like your tired of having to hide things from that person. thank you for entering my contest!

[Michael Lasalle]

erin, readong this work of heart to midi blue dreamer, this poem has the absoluteblues swing, every sentence created a classic eloquentlyintenful desirous emotional feeling of safeguardthe form fit the expression perfectly in my opinion,sad cases, tragic love-lorn poised to cause conditionseffecing the heart in sad ways, sculpted detail, peace, mike

[The Last Preacher ( If ..]

very nice
i love the concept and the piece great job:D

[C.m.v]

This one really speaks to me. There's raw emotion in here and I think it would be a wonderful song. It could be ballad, or sung with a little bit of rock..(think Kelly Clarkson and "Never Again".)