From Out of The Rain

"Whenever the moon and stars are set
And the sun has gone to bed
And the night has come, and the land is dark"
that's what my mother said

"You'll see them come from out of the rain
When the moon hangs overhead
When the stars shine bright throughout the night,"
that's what my mother said

"His clothes are as dark as the night is black
But his cape is the deepest red
And his skin is as white as snow, I've heard"
that's what my mother said

"Her eyes glow bright like a prowling cat's
Her feet have a cat's silent tread
And she creeps up unheard from out of the rain"
that's what my mother said

"They stand together beneath the stars
And stare at the moon overhead
And through the rain you can hear them sing"
that's what my mother said

"And when the moon and stars grow tired
And the sun gets out of bed
You'll watch them dissolve back into the rain"
that's what my mother said

Last night, when the moon and stars were set
And the sun had gone to bed
I saw them come from out of the rain
Just like my mother said

Reviews

[Pearls Of Wisdom...Youn..]

Nice! write up! Check out my stuff if you are looking for rhythm also

[Ethan Mariner]

Good work. My favorite things about it are, first, that it is rhymed, a seemingly rare thing on this site, and secondly, the use of repitition with "that's what my mother said".