Forgive Me

Forgive Me Not

There are times I sit and wonder,

Was it my fault or was it yours,

I can't sit here forever,

Until we figure this out,

So for now I shall just ponder,

With walking my soul in tours,

Maybe the answer will come to me never,

Then I can just sit this one out,

How can I be lost in the memories I relive

And finally realize that it's me I can't forgive.

Reviews

[Rodrick Franklin McLare..]

With walking my soul in tours,

Really like this line! For me it generates an unlimited extension, that the soul in in fact is and you have captured that for me. Thanx... I will if you don't mind copy & paste this, not to use... no it is your creation. Bit yo ponder and inspire further the relationship, it has created in me. Not often did I find this type of depth of phrase.

I felt there were quite a few segments with straight on appeal. That possibly speak to the type of person you are. This to is a nice reflection, as this piece though not knowing you, allow the reader in and a very personal peek at your special qualities of love and friendship. You offer of yourself freely, even when it hurts. 'Maybe the answer will come to me never,' like this... the caring.
And the pain: How can I be lost in the memories I relive.

Nice work, and at the same time hard work to relive... it moved me ...Ro...

[~Daugher of the King~]

This is very well written! Nice work! :) I love the line: "With walking my soul in tours" - it is such clever wording! Your poem speaks very well of something that a lot of us endure - mulling over past wrongdoings, forgiving, and forgetting. I will just add, though, that if you're going to keep it the way you have written it ("How can I..."), then you need to add a question mark right after the final line. ;) Oh, and I just noticed that you need to add a question mark after the line, "Was it my fault or was it yours," in place of the comma. Sorry to be a grammar freak, lol, it's just my thoughtful way of helping. :) Keep up the good work, though! :)

[deeps]

This is such a wonderful write here.
Deep and powerful as well.
I enjoyed this write. Very well written and expressed.

[Ruth]

Indepth and concise, lovely piece, refectively haunting xx

[Mitch*Dandy]

I like this poem! Very true and real. Great writing thanks for sharing :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is powerful and true. It is hard to forgive our self for deeds done in a life. Even if we not in the wrong. I like the questions asks in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote