Porcelain Girl

Porcelain girl

 Ever so perfect

 Mind so wrecked

  But not a flaw on surface to detect

 Porcelain girl

 Ever so fragile

 Holding a confident style

  You hope you're worthwhile

 Porcelain girl  

You're not in control 

You have not your own soul

 They'll break you in whole 

 Porcelain girl 

Made up so nice

 They take one hit then twice

 And another thrice 

 Porcelain girl

 Ever so shattered 

 Pieces all over and scattered

Now you know you never mattered

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Author's Note

Random though there are a few things I need to do though:)

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Smooth flow, as Owlgirl says so below, and I enjoyed this piece. I suggest shortening the last two lines of this piece, as (or at least in my opinion) they disturb the flow and seem stressed. I would recommend removing "so many" in the second to the last line, and rephrasing the last one. Other than that, well done indeed.

[Owlgirl]

Wow, very well written, and smooth flow~