sparkle

sparkle

A Poem by Shoshana
"

unrequited love is a b***h

"
she told me to wait and see the glint, in your eyes. 
i waited patiently, seeing is she was right.
staring into the gold rimmed pupil of the one i loved, as he stared back and showed
no sparkle whatsoever. 

© 2020 Shoshana


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Indeed, it does hurt. On the other hand, better to find out early than to get dumped suddenly a year down the road. Consider dropping the comma after glint in line 1 and substituting if for is in line 2.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shoshana

3 Months Ago

thank you so much i appreciate the tip :))
So sad when they don't love you back and lack that shared sparkle. A good write.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddening, deeply thought out and bursting with emotion. 'Shoshana' does not disapoint!

Posted 3 Months Ago



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Added on January 6, 2020
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