Porcelain Love

For the cascade nine contest.

Doll,

take care.

I'm fragile,

so... breakable.

Ignore what they say-

love is merely porcelain,

watch it shatter viciously!

Then again, hearts so delicate

should heed this devestating warning.

 

Author's Note

More experimental poetry. Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[George Love]

This worked very well. Nice work!!

[He@ther!]

I love this!!:)
The atmosphere about it is immensely intriguing.
In its own way, its sort of exotic and delicate.
It has the same sort of feel as, say, a Victorian piece maybe?
If it makes any sense to say that.
Anyway, I enjoyed this a great deal.
Thanks for sharing!!:)

-Heather:)

[Crazy Cat Man]

delicate flower. Can easily be plucked away. :(

great piece. You just keep changing your writing style to more mature. I wish I can do the same :D

[JordanAnthony]

This is amazing.
I love the comparison to love and porcelain, it's so true.
Love can shatter in an instant.
This is gold, I hope you win the contest.

[lindsay]

This such a great comparison of love and so different. I love this greatly. This experimental poetry of yours is great. I can almost hear this in my head, like the verse to a rock song.

[Dillon Cotter]

smooth, lushes and refreshing. Its beautiful and elegant wording brought me in. well job Steph.

-Will

[J.R Schlievert]

I think is was well done I love this kind of poetry though�..the kind that makes you think great poem!

[An owl on the moon]

Oh, this was powerful! The lines... as they lengthened also seemed to deepen in color and flow. This was brilliant and moving!

[Bud]

Yes, it is the fragility of love that makes it so special, and strong. It's so much more than one word or definition can possible come close to defining. It is meant to be appreciated, respected, and handled with care. Another Outstanding piece of your wonderful art!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I like it, very powerful... especially these lines

love is merely porcelain,
watch it shatter viciously!

A great way to describe how fragile love can be.