The Art of Seduction

The art of seduction.

In his hands he holds a brittle piece of a palm frond

as he stares out at the ocean,

listening to the pleading calls of the seagulls.

Ratat is startled when he feels the hot breath

of his true love against the nape of his neck,

then turns around and sweeps his hand through her

symphonic hair, all the while he's studying her features

with great intensity.

After exposing her ear which is decorated with rings

and jewels, he strokes the back of her neck.

She follows his eyes with her own,

then closes her painted eyes,

while leaning her head back,

then tilts it to the side,

and opens her eyes once more with her gaze

still fixed upon him.

Upon rubbing his soft lips with her finger tips,

he gently takes her hand,

and kisses the tips of her fingers all the way up to her

shoulder, brushing his lips against her collar bone,

up her throat, and then their lips meet in a tender embrace.

Author's Note

What do you think of the imagery.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

the images in this piece are exquisitely penned. It is much like the prologue of a story

[Suzanne Sherif]

Beautiful imagery, evoking a feeling of tenderness.

[_______________________..]

I like the romance found in this poem.

[Sherika]

I think the imagery is is very strong in this piece, you could follows each movement and picture every thing based on the description

[poetic soul]

its really tingling...esp. towards the end...i liked it..enjoyed the read... :)

love,
krishna

[Spit_and_Prayers]

A well painted scene. The poem relies entirely on its imagery, and that's tough to do, but I think you've done a good job at it. One suggestion though, avoid the cliche of "raven hair".

[Kairi_Lynn]

What amazing imagery, I think the piece is really realistic and very romantic. Though I wish it could have lasted a little bit longer and mabye not had so many 'she' and 'he' in it.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, this is a lovely piece. The imagery is fantastic and beautiful. Amazing job!!!

Heather

[THE LOST ROSE]

The imagery came across as a movie scene. Great job. The flow was fantastic and each step taken is felt by the reader. Fantastic job here. Keep writing and sharing.

[Nicole]

This was beautiful.
The mental picture I got was amazing.
Made me feel tingly. xD
You definately have imagery down packed.
The scene itself like Fabian had said.
Was a very relaxing setting and made it perfect for them as a couple to be in one another's embrace.
Well written, I enjoyed it. :)