The Mysterious Man

The Mysterious Man

A Poem by storiestotell
"

A young girl meets up with the man of her dreams!

"

 

Monday was the first time I saw him

He walked into the crowded room

I spotted him right away

His dark blue eyes felt like they were alluring me to come to him

 

 

 

Tuesday he came into the grocery store where I worked

I prayed he would come to my check out lane

but he went through the express lane instood!

 

Wednesday I woke up in a funk

Why was I acting like this?

I didn't even know him,

but I felt peaceful when he was near

 

Thursday I went for a walk in the park

He was sitting on a bench by  the pond

I headed toward him, but heard my name

When I turned back, he was gone

 

 

Friday I stayed in bed all day

When I slept I saw his face

Something about him was  surreal

 

 

Saturday I decided to go to a party

My heart was breaking, he never showed up

I drank too much, trying to drown my sorrow

When I left I knew I shouldn't drive, but I did!

 

 

Sunday I awoke in the hospital

I felt a presence in my room

I looked beside my bed, it was him!

He was bright and shiny

I felt at peace

"Don't be afraid," he said.

"I'm your angel of death!"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2010 storiestotell


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If you know the definition of severe irony. Girl season man that has a crush on him after a while she gets depressed over not seeing him and then she ends up in the hospital next to the angel of death Which was the man is she had a crush on. I love the ending to this! It's very surprising and it pleased me so. Even though I never really have much of a rhyme scheme or rhythm to it


Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh wow, love the surprise ending! Good read!

Posted 10 Years Ago


oh my goodness.. quite an unexpected end. Good write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I feel chills running up and down my spine lol

Firstly congrats on the effective use of color.

And secondly, this poem scared me, in a good way^

You have proven what other talented artists are proving, and that is that you don't need rhyme or convention to write a good poem^

-Dream

Posted 10 Years Ago


WOW! That was totally unexpected! I thought it would be a love poem! WOW! That was intense!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I wasn't expecting that, you created a strange kind of suspense.

Posted 10 Years Ago


The Angel of Death ain't good to have around. I like the story in this poem. You create a very good tale. I like the twist at the end. A outstanding story. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


this is a perfect 10!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Love the surprise ending!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on December 1, 2010
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storiestotell
storiestotell

Harrisville, MS



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