Walking Home from the Pride Parade

On the subway home last night from work
A thousand rainbows greeted me
Beads, flags, badges, hats, and t-shirts
The parade had ended, and people were headed home
Beads, hats, and badges were pulled off
The t-shirts were hidden away by jackets
Flags were turned upside down in bags so nobody would see
Couples stopped holding hands and sweet-talking
People broke off in stiff, nervous factions
Anxious about being targeted on the walk home
Or of the disapproval of one's own family
The lights in everyone's eyes quickly dimmed to emptiness
As pride and excitement were replaced with fear and frustration
Last night, on my way home from work
I watched the masses start towards home
But though they had been ten-thousand strong
Each individual walked alone

Reviews

[streetrose]

Wow. I hope I can write as good as you some day. I've only been writing for about week now and I suck. I hope to get advice from you. This was amazing. I like how it had a kinda cliff-hanger ending, almost like there was some underlying emotion the whole time. The only thing I can critique is line 5; it sounded awkward for some reason, can't really explain it. Also, is there a reason you don't use punctuation, not that there's anything wrong with it (I've seen it done plenty of times in poetry), but I just want to know why you choose not to use it.

[streetrose]

Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words. Everybody can write, it just takes a lot of practice to develop the skill and find your own voice. I'm glad you liked the piece, and I will look into line five. I don't use punctuation in my poetry because it's a skill I haven't developed and my attempts to use punctuation in my poetry hindered my writing.

[streetrose]

I understand your point about punctuation perfectly.

[Hello there]

Hahahahahahahaha, you can't even use punctuation, yet you call yourself a poet. Hilarious

[streetrose]

Poetry don't need punctuation. You shouldn't laugh at this author cuz' you dont even have writing of your own on here. I'm sick and tired of having your terrible a*s reviews pop up on my news feed all the time

[Baby Ricochet]

Good story. Keep writing.......................

[streetrose]

Thank you for reading and for your kind words, I'm glad you liked it.