My Gone Muse

I hope you enjoy this read

Those moon beams no more twinkle over your skin

That beating heart no more smile when you pass by.

That sun no more climbs the universe to give me strength

It doesn't bring me happiness and not even light.

 

Mother looked at me and started at my art

Split its curses over what I wrote and tore everything apart.

I plead, I cried, I begged for one reason to all of that

The moon looked at me arrogantly and said with his mean voice:

“You no more have muse so what are you afraid to lose?

A happy ending that you will never have or a smile that you fake ?

A lie that you expelled over this cursed world or over who ever

You no more have a muse so there is nothing else to lose”.

 

The moon was right and I admit that it was a plight

The sun burnt my little bones and took away what was left of this soul.

Nothing else remained, because I lost my muse

I lost you. Forever. You.I.Lost.You.My.Muse.

Author's Note

I just want to add few notes :
"Mother" I meant mother nature .
And I just would like to ask, what do you think of the fragmentation in the last line ?

I dont often write because I actually lost my muse and Im just trying to write based on the memories and the "left overs" of my feelings .

I hope you like :)

Reviews

[cycy]

wow sue very well writen i enjoyed reading it so much..well written hunny :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this too, especially the full stops in the last line. Great idea, fine write.

[R Smith]

I like very much Suhad, its one of your very best, your muse seems to be intact, the poetry in this heartfelt work is elegant and very special, the fragmentation to the last line I think would look better with the words separated by comma's and maybe place the words below each other but that's just my view, its your work you make it as you wish, its very good indeed :)

[wordman]

you did a great bob,you poured out your feelings

[fattycbreezy52]

This is like amazing.Brutal yet hard-hitting.
yes, we are tracing the same path dude.
we depict honesty.
I am bored of those conventional poems.
The line "you no more have muse....lose"---I will die for these words...amazing writeup
Keep writing:)

[ANTO]

These 'left overs' I would gladly have.
The first stanza is pure class.
Especially this "...sun no more climbs the universe..."

Powerful imagery of the moon looking on and rebuking while mother desecrates the writings. Wow

The speech directed at the muse in the final stanza suggests at least that the author feels that they are within distance and perhaps a reunion may be possible in the future - all is not lost then.

[stars are far]

thank you so much for you review its appreciated . :)))))))

[Saddam]

Mother looked at me and started at my art
Split its curses over what I wrote and tore everything apart.
I plead, I cried, I begged for one reason to all of that
The moon looked at me arrogantly and said with his mean voice:

True, the reason is Nepal earthquake. We must gave back what we get from the nature.
Awaking write.