My Pencil is a Ballerina

My Pencil is a Ballerina

A Poem by writingcrazy55555
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A poem I wrote today.

"

When I write,

My pencil is a

ballerina.

It dances

across the page,

graceful,

elegant,

spinning and

twirling around,

tapping its

light pink

shoes delicately

on the similes

and metaphors

as it dances.

The paper is

Its dance studio,

The one place where

it can

express itself.

The ballerina

smiles and laughs,

for she is doing

what she does best,

dancing the day away

dancing its

complex dance.

Sometimes

it falters, and falls,

and the results are

often irregular,

but the ballerina

keeps going

until she has

met her

expectations.

Only then does

she rest,

satisfied.

© 2012 writingcrazy55555


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Simply B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L!!! So beautiful that I had to spell beautiful out like that instead of just saying beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


writingcrazy55555

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Quite a sweet and innocent piece. Very gentle and written with a very innocent outlook. A pleasant read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


writingcrazy55555

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
The concept of the poem is great I just think it needs substance. It needs something to fill in the blanks your metaphors are creating.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is such a lovely poem. And great metaphor, I never thought of it that way!

Posted 7 Years Ago


writingcrazy55555

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
The flow of this powem is really good. The short sentences say a lot and it has a lovely, creative rhythm, almost musical.
Do try and overcome the capital letters at the beginning of each sentence. Sometimes if one is persistent enough, it works.
Lizbeth

Posted 7 Years Ago


writingcrazy55555

7 Years Ago

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it, and yes I have to fix that.
Yay!!!!!! Hey it's Chloe again and I LOVE this one!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I dance ballet, so I know that and can imagine it very well!!!!!!!! Ok so bye :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Great lol it sounds similar to a one i saw on this website :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


wonderful idea..But I do think it needs a little editing...You paint a great picture of the performing pencil and I can identify with that...the amount of time that I spend writing...It really is a terrific idea!

Posted 7 Years Ago


writingcrazy55555

7 Years Ago

Thanks you. Yes, I just wrote it and put it up. I didn't really look it over :) Thanks for the nice .. read more
Dr. Wood ?

7 Years Ago

no problem, I sometimes post immediately after completing a piece...though loads of the stuff I have.. read more

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Added on July 15, 2012
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Tags: poem, poetry, ballerina, dancing, writing, pretty, lovely, elegant

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I am a writing crazy person (hence the name), for no other reason besides the fact that I love writing! I love to read too, and LOVE the Harry Potter series! I write whenever I have free time, and I a.. more..

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