Five a day

A poem about the moments leading up to orgasm, and how it's such a waste when a women stops a little short.

I felt the horns,

and so did you.

I dropped my trousers,

and so did you.

I felt around,

and so did you.

I dropped to the ground,

and so did you.

You asked me to stay,

so I stayed and submersed.

Between your legs,

as you prayed and you cursed.

After a slow release,

it was my turn to get played with

and played with I was,

and I prayed and I prayed.

As the blood rushed

from your head to mine,

the eternal flame grew

and it grew and it grew,

but as you approached the finish line,

you suddenly decided to stop.

And for all of the effort that you had put in to take me

past the stars and the clouds, to the vast beauty of the heavens,

one ejaculation contains the same amount of vitamins, and minerals

as ten eggs, six oranges and two lemons.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Brighid an Lasair]

This is great, it has a very real flare to it and fantastic metaphors that really lead you along this little escapade.

And for all of the effort that you had put in to take me
past the stars and the clouds, to the vast beauty of the heavens,
one ejaculation contains the same amount of vitamins, and minerals
as ten eggs, six oranges and two lemons.

Those lines were a perfect way to end it, great job!

[Seosaimhín]

Wolfshrew said it better than I could have! The last two lines made me laugh quite loudly, they were probably my favourite part of the poem, though I enjoyed the whole piece.

[Shelby. Loves ya. :3]

i agree tht it was good and i guess the begining made me think diffrently and the end changed the whole thought of it.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

holy s**t wtf thats a little hot and weird but very good

[Citizen Erased]

Haha, well done!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

very clever!!!!~ oh the metaphors are DIVINE!~ from nirvanic heights to every day skin~ jump off done brilliantly!!!~

[Coyote Poetry]

A tale of great sadness. When the motion of something good is stop. Leave great pain. I like the story in the poem. My grandfather taught me a long time ago. Woman have the power to make a man beg for forgiveness before he done anything wrong. A outstanding poem. Thank you.

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LMAO...oh dear..

[Catonia06]

great poem :)