Heaven Drenched

Heaven Drenched

A Poem by Susan 🦋


Heaven Drenched

How time begets such sweet romance

as tender notions dare impart.

Eyes bathed in moonlight, now entrance

quick steady beating of my heart.


Strong wanting arms draw ever close,

your body easing every ache.

Restraint now falls like dominoes,

this lover's dance of give 'n take.


Beneath our love and all around

bright starlit Heaven's blush and stare.

Breath quivers as soft lips surround ... 

let warm winds eavesdrop, I don't care.


Oh, wrap me in unbound desire,

till moments pause midst passing time.

Thus, rendering twin souls afire

and fantasies begin to chime.


Come lay me down beneath thy brawn

to share in wondrous ecstasy.

Shall wish away the breaking dawn,

when blissful waves peak endlessly.


’Tween rest subdues our appetites

'pon fallen embers, duly quenched...

What lingers, once again, ignites

two worlds, forever Heaven drenched.


A lover's story laced in gold,

sustaining breath therein remains.

Alone, You perfectly uphold

the beating life ~ within my veins

© 2022 Susan 🦋


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Okay, now I have to go take a cold shower. Loved the flow of this exotic piece of work. Passionate love does weird things to the minds of mice and men. Maybe I've carried that a bit far.
Loved it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

You are fine :) thanks for reading and leaving such a sweet review. 💐
PERFECT image you used!! Love it..

Posted 1 Year Ago


I just reread this wonderful poem of yours and found that I was counting the 8 per line syllables...so great!!!
Lisa, now in Spain

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lisa 💐
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome Susan.
Lisa. early dark morning in Spain
Good Sunday morning, Susan 🌤

After the fourth read, catching my breath was the first necessity before being able to sensibly review this captivatingly stupendous tribute to the glory of romance, love, and lovemaking.
Besides the jaw-dropping artwork choice, from eye candy font color, spot-on iambic tetrameter, immaculate rhymes, to smooth as silk syntax, spellbinding imagery, tantalizingly emotive vigor, and undeniable sensational mind's-eye cerebral, spiritual, and wondrously thrilling physical stimulation … the level of open, honest sincerity in the expressions of tactile feeling, sexual heat, and undeniable desire is stunning to the senses.
Of all the sensually vibrant, rhythmically beating love poems I've ever read, Susan, with this one, you've truly surpassed them all.
In each reading, I tried selecting one line or verse over the other, but each was so necessary in the totality of captivating moment and nuance, the one thing that grabbed in a particularly special way is this stunning verse:
"A lovers' story laced in gold,
sustaining breath therein remains.
Alone, You perfectly uphold
the beating life ~ within my veins."

Hm? Looking back, it seems I've written a dissertation, but well deserved of such a heaven~drenched poetic masterpiece … I warmly, gratefully bow! ⁓ Richard🥂

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

So, you like this one Richard? 😉 Richard! Your review is BETTER than the poem!!! I’ve read in o.. read more
Richard🖌

1 Year Ago

Ahhh, your smile made,
And, what could be more lovely a reaction?
Somethings inspire a.. read more
wow, such a rapture. This is an all consuming exploration into sensual and intimate love. Thank you

Posted 1 Year Ago


Brad Dehler

1 Year Ago

Absolutely. Delicious
Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

… I do write a bit of love poetry ❤️. I’ll get over to your page again soon.
Brad Dehler

1 Year Ago

Excellent! Thank you Susan 😉
The romantisicm in this is very reminicent of Richard's romantic poems. (I have his book haha). Your style is perfect for classic poetry with the syllable counts embellished with the old style words. This is perfect poetry, Susan. The emotion is what the reader is left with. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Hey you! Thanks for reading and for this awesome review!!!
A romantic and sensual poem, with perfect rhythm and rhyme. Love is a wonderful thing, and it should indeed be celebrated!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Hi Robert! Thanks for reviewing! I need to head over to your page soon 😊
sheesh! what can one say .. such a gift you have, Susan! every word and line to be savored and built upon .. so very romantic .. such youthful ideals and dreams come true in such a union .. just beautiful .. makes me want to find the Fountain of Youth :))))))))))))))))))))))))))
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

Hi Gene, so you like it huh? 😊 Thank you for the compliment! Very nice of you. I’ve written a l.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes! i like it hon! ;) it's a winner no matter the outcome ... inspires me
Hi Susan, well lovers can reignite even if they are not that young... That I know for sure..
not always, of course but with the right partner love can flourish..
I really loved you sensual poem dear Susan..
Lisa, now in Spain

Posted 1 Year Ago


Restrained erotica here, without vulgarity, which is as it should be. The lovers must be young, if the embers reignite that quickly.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan 🦋

1 Year Ago

:) ha! Wellll maybe? Thanks for reading and leaving me a positive review! Wishing you a lovely Sund.. read more

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Added on June 11, 2022
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