Be My Hero?

Be My Hero?

A Poem by .SaveSydney!.

I used to be lovestruck, but now i'm just fucked up. -Hollywood Undead. <3


I never knew perfection until

I heard you speak..

I'm breaking.

I know I'd be better,

So, so much better!

Without the weight of you,

Or the worry of you.

But can I tell you?

No, I can't.

Not yet.

I'm not even close to ready,

To tell you;

All of the things you've done wrong.

Or let go of;

All of the things you do right.

Save me from you.

Be my hero,

Just this once?



© 2010 .SaveSydney!.

Author's Note

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I like it. You put it together like elements of a conversation that we only get part of. I like that. It makes it more dramatic I think, in my humble opinion. It has a pretty powerful delivery with the context of the hero. I guess its unexpected with a twist at the end. Nice job.

Posted 9 Years Ago

It's nice. Good job. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

woah!! nicely written XD

Posted 10 Years Ago

Wow, I loved it! great emotion here! Keep up the good work! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

this was fantastic poen i really enjoied it keep up the good work

Posted 10 Years Ago

This was a good poem. I really think this was good. I feel bad that you can't tell the loser. Anyways thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on August 5, 2010
Last Updated on August 5, 2010



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