Sometimes I'm Mean.

Sometimes I'm Mean.

A Poem by Sydney Evans
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I'm feeling a little mischevious.

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I'm a darling girl. 
As kind as can be.
I live in a messy world.
Sometimes I'm mean.
I'm fun and sweet,
But even I get sour.
I can be the perfect treat,
Or I can have all the power.
I can step on some toes.
I can make smiles frown.
I can be a black rose,
Or I can push people down.
I don't like this side.
It's rarely seen.
On that I haven't lied.
Sometimes I'm mean.

© 2011 Sydney Evans


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This is a very good poem. Your sing-song way of describing your dark side just shows your sweetnes you mentioned in your poem... All people have their "mean" Sides and it only hurts the best ones to have that side.... Excellent write and such wonderful talent! :-D

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like this poem a lot, it's very fun and flows perfectly. :) Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


haha i don't think i've ever seen this mean sydney

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem! I love the honesty here. Its a fantastic take on life.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This poem was good, but not great. It was a bit too cliche for my taste, and you seemed to sacrifice a lot of your meaning for rhyming words. That's the trademark of someone who hasn't been writing poetry for an extensive amount of time, or someone who has but hasn't yet perfected the art. If you continue and alter your style to be a bit more unique, you could do great things. Don't be discouraged by this feedback, because your descriptions were good. Especially the way you contrasted things, and spelled out how you could be one way then the other. But I would love to see your descriptions even better, perhaps lengthier, because in a poem like this, more content helps to highlight your points.

Good luck.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Pros: Haha, I like this one! I love this whole little sweet girl thing with a dash of fire. It made me giggle here and there. I like your rhyme scheme, and it doesn't seemed forced, which is good. It flows well, and it ends well.

Cons: None

Overall: I liked this one a lot :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I thought this was great! I love how you show how people can have both a kind side and a mean side. I loved this, you wrote it so well. Great poem!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Life allow us to be many things. I learn with age. Best to keep the demons at bay. A interesting poem. Difficult to show a smile all the time.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice poem overall :) and very true , but I would suggest you to rework the first stanza because it breaks the rhyme and reads a bit odd ... right now no suggestion is coming to my mind ... will let you know if I find something .


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very good poem. Your sing-song way of describing your dark side just shows your sweetnes you mentioned in your poem... All people have their "mean" Sides and it only hurts the best ones to have that side.... Excellent write and such wonderful talent! :-D

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sydney Evans
Sydney Evans

Eaton, OH



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