Bath

Bath

A Poem by Sydney
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I was enjoying the warmth after a long day, and felt inspired.

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As I lay
In total silence
Dead still in the burning water
I watched the wick slowly disappear as a brilliant blue color surrounds it.

Sipping my
Which was once grapes
I slowly pour more in my half empty glass
Fading from my mind
Memories dimming
And life just
Relaxes. 

I alternate legs
Taking turns outside
In the coldness
Watching the vapor arise from my skin.

Here,
I find my peace.
I lift my head and ask the ceiling,
"Can I lay here, until death due us part?"

© 2019 Sydney


Author's Note

Sydney
It was a hard day. I hope you enjoyed! Reviews are always appreciated. Have a great day.

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Sydney, this is a good example of how the most simple thoughts can become the best poetry. I admire how you not only captured the moment but described it without the typical cliches (“once grapes”). We, the readers, can then see the texture and color, perhaps smooth and deep red.

You’ve painted peace and calm, and then made it even more special with the last line. That line seems to have at least two layers. The narrator could be saying, maybe a little tongue-in-cheek, “this is better than marriage” or it’s just a pleasant escape from the day’s realities.

I’ll look for more of your work. Thanks for sharing this one.

Posted 5 Months Ago



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Sydney
Sydney

Savannah, GA



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