Our Story

Our Story

A Poem by Tamme
"

By far not a work of literary genius but fun to write.

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I can't rewrite our story

So you can have your happy ending.

For your dreams to come to life

Mine must be left to die.

You would be drawn different,

To be that hero,

And not the  mess of a man

I feel in love with.

 

Not to mention,

I think I once was told,

There is a difference

Between reality and fiction,

I believe I recall,

In that fiction must make sense

This is so hard to craft

When in the common sense

It's something you lack...

© 2008 Tamme


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i really like this!

my favorite lines:
So you can have your happy ending.
For your dreams to come to life
Mine must be left to die.
You would be drawn different,
To be that hero,
And not the man I love.

and:
When in the common sense
It's something you lack...


it reads so easily and clearly. well done and worth the 100 rating!

edit: lol, well if you wanted it rated, i would have gotten 100! :)


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very fine! it is strong and acutely observant!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is so good that I wish that it was written from the other side - the man that it was written about - from his point of view. Then I could send it to every woman that I have ever dated. I really liked the insight.

Posted 12 Years Ago


you have my vote!

Posted 12 Years Ago


that's great i love the way you wrote it thats its a keeper great work

Posted 13 Years Ago


Tamme, this is an excellent gentle rant.....very well written, creative and to-the-point.

I love the reference to fiction versus reality in that it has to make sense.

Awesome write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I loved the opening two lines. You can't change whats happened, once its done, its done. A very good thoughtful write. I enjoyed this piece.


Posted 13 Years Ago


Hey, I like the concept of fiction being harder than reality because fiction has to be coherent.
Haha...good point.
This was kind of a fun and a sad read; I'm not sure how it's supposed to be read(?)

Thanks for sharing it.
Nice write.

"And not the mess of a man
I feel in love with" - sweet.


Posted 13 Years Ago


You have good form and rhythm.

The use of words match with your message well.

And the message is imparted very well. this is a good read. And an insightful one

Posted 13 Years Ago


this was a fun piece!
Sandra

Posted 13 Years Ago


This something that I believe most can relate to in some kind of way. Looking back over life and relationships we are unable to change people really and Is there ever a happy ending. I think we are able to adjust and accept that is what makes the story what it is. I enjoyed this and it gave me wonderful thoughts and idea which I am always grateful for.


Well Done!!!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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