The Last Breath

The Last Breath

A Poem by RTB

The taste, misplaced, not one for me to waste,

The glory the grace, no need to be defaced,

Its time, our prime, a gift of all mankind,

The fear of whats near, not mine to decline,

No wait! my fate, something none should take,

But still, the deal, left me no appeal,

Your hope, uncloaked, please do not revoke,

Restate, untaint, my emotions left as blank,

Regret, respect, hope god is then whats next,

The line, declines, the flat is near its time,

I pray, please stay,

Your tears touch my skin as my last breath slips away........

© 2010 RTB


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such emotion! nice word scheme though.

Posted 9 Years Ago


good rhyming and rhythm..
again, good job..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Love the brisk pace, the urgency, the questionmarks within the journey to understand the purpose of life before it is too late....well, that's what I take away.
My favorite line "Your tears touch my skin as my last breath slips away......." touches me deeply !!

Awesome :)




Posted 9 Years Ago


its very rhythmic... ur choice of words is very good.... tc

Posted 9 Years Ago


KURRUPTED (STOOPD UP APPLAUDING AND SAID)- "Wow this piece is awesome, the rhyming really put that magnificent touch to it...something that could really go with some rap beats...some real Dr Dre beats"
not my last breath but it indeed took my breath away....nice job, well penned

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very well written, you express the motions very clearly, and i enjoy the form of this as well. I look forward to more

Posted 9 Years Ago


WOW this is powerful and emotions very well expressed.

Posted 9 Years Ago


wow. i love it.
i'd pick my favourite part, but the whole thing was brilliant.
well done (: xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


Indeed intense!
This is par excellence!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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