Suicide

Clenching the divine in the palm of my hand,

Release is my options no room to expand,

 

Digging in deep for this vigorous trial,

Only to come back with a vicious denial,

 

Glistening once but now ominous my eyes,

Plainly just darkness no splits or divides,

 

My emotion now simple to others it spreads,

Gave one last look in the mirror and blew off my head..

 

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Sad poem. I've thought about committing suicide may times. But I will never go through with it. I think this was good though. Thanks for sharing. :()

[Liz-z]

"My emotion now simple to others it spreads,

Gave one last look in the mirror and blew off my head.."
Wow... just wow. It was short, yet straight to the point. Very vivid... I hope you'll never do this in real life though... O_O
Amazing job! :D

[Marie Harrison]

What a rant. I hope you never do this, but your self expression was very vivid to me. Keep writing!

[Charles]

You certainly make a point with the last line - quite unexpected the way you got to it (despite the title). There are way too many spelling errors in this otherwise brief and somewhat enchanting poem (despite the topic)

[Mauricio Montoya]

put that rage on the page.
Nice work.

[Taylor H.]

I accidentally gave you a 10 instead of a 100 lol

[Taylor H.]

I loved this! I thought it all flowed together very well.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Loved this so much it made me smile! (creepy!) I love the whole thing, but the last line just gets me! Good job! ;p

[Immortal1967]

short and direct...good rhyme scheme. good job

[Richard Williams]

Kinda "blows off your head" at the end here...whew! That's a pretty neat trick, though, being able to write a poem about blowing your head off after blowing your head off. That must have hurt.