Shattered

Broken

Breathless, the visions, pulsing, refined,

Choking and gasping. I'm dying.. rewind,

 

Emotions were pulling, our words so unkind,

Tugging but fading, your no longer mine,

 

Seeing. Believing.. no longer combined,,

You stole my damn heart and left me behind....

 

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

Very touching, although quite short a powerful message has been written and full of emotions.

[HorrorMaster]

Nice short poem I like it

[Myenigma]

"You stole my damn heart and left me behind...."
heh, that tends to happen...

[Sunni Davis]

I can identify with the heartbreak expressed here. The images are so vivid in my mind. Nicely done!

[tigerclaw]

I hear ya.

[ju]

like this too- love the rhythm.

[Fool]

Powerful. I felt each of those words.

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A very beautiful and intense piece. Your choice of wording increases the power and imagery of your poem. Its subtle yet thought provoking and deeply beautiful. Nice writing that captivates and makes you think and feel.

[Morning Star]

Brilliant piece
your words are like lyrics to country western song
this poem would make a beautiful song
Flow is excellent and your message clear

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