Shallow waters

Shallow waters

A Poem by terry smith

I dipped my middle finger
 in the shallow pool you call a soul
then flick tiny droplets of you 
against  the bedsheets
 where moments before
 we made love...
it froze
 instantly
 because you are a cold
 hearted b***h 
and I hate that I love you.

© 2015 terry smith


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" in the shallow pool you call a soul
then flick tiny droplets of you
against the bedsheets"

Beautiful imagery, I like the hint of murder captivated here thanks for sharing - ATC

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Wow...intense! It sucks when we love someone that doesn't love you back. Very relatable, my dear poet

Posted 8 Years Ago


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B
oh my
Hmmm
everyone is different
maybe she isnt like you
but she is like someone else
you are very honest
that is cool

Posted 8 Years Ago


B

8 Years Ago

yeah
it shows
that is a golden quality never change
terry smith

8 Years Ago

Why thank you very much!!!! :D
B

8 Years Ago

Pleasure :)
raw and powerful write! well composed!

Posted 8 Years Ago


awesome poem.
Very relatable.
I hate when that happens, I seek a warmer soul now...

Posted 8 Years Ago


A little Joan Jett for the soul...your angst spoke volumes!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ya, I like it. Youve displayed your shackles well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


terry smith

8 Years Ago

Thank you!!
"I hate that I love you" so true! Beautiful poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


terry smith

8 Years Ago

Thank you!!
This is my favorite poem of the day. Brilliantly wrote by a brilliant bloke. Fantastic

Posted 8 Years Ago


terry smith

8 Years Ago

Thank you JCC.
Extremely stark....raw and dark....but mostly honest....real and honest....nicely done.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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