Sonnet on Sleep (revised)

Sonnet on Sleep (revised)

A Poem by Trevor Jay Bloodworth
"

Sleep is great.

"

Oh dear light, won’t you please let my eyes go!

I must again visit my long gone friend,

Who waits for me at night, however slow.

Let me be, and then my mind onward send,

My sleepy soul to that heavenly place,

Full of things like dreams, magic, and good rest.

And when departed at once do embrace

My thoughts that are here as a gentle guest.

But if you decide to be evil now,

Open my eyes from the nightmare, oh please!

I will wake in sweat and wonder just how

My pleasantness you did so quickly seize.

The realm of dreams is faintly light and pure,

But full of crushing darkness, I am sure.

© 2013 Trevor Jay Bloodworth


Author's Note

Trevor Jay Bloodworth
My revised version of the "Sonnet on Sleep". All criticisms welcome!

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Another wonderful poem! Bravo!

Posted 10 Years Ago


It must have been challenging to get the meter right! Kudos.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

10 Years Ago

It was, actually. Took me a little while, with a lot of revisions.
Wonderful Sonnet, Trevor. Beginning with the need of sleep, ending with the need of dreams. I like the twist there. Good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Interesting read...most enjoyable :) x

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like it. Good work. I think I will read it tonight before going to bed. It should help!
Seriously, I like its rhythm and flow.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I really enjoyed this one Trevor.. It confused me and I love that lol... It starts out asking the light to let you go insinuating you need to sleep but ends up asking the dream to let you wake up.. Very interesting twist. I love it.. shallimarRose ...

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like the turn in this one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much! You're reviews are always welcome and considered highly.
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Sam
Very Very nicely done. I love the intensity it adds to parts and softness to others. The contrast is amazing. No criticisms here my friend. Great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much! It really didn't take me long to revise it. I just had to get the meter JUST ri.. read more
Sam

11 Years Ago

But you were able to locate the exact part and sometimes that is really difficult because if you rev.. read more
Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Hahah. Again, thank you very much.

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Trevor Jay Bloodworth
Trevor Jay Bloodworth

Bradford, TN



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Just another guy. Nothing special. 22 years old. From Tennessee. I started writing as a hobby while on deployment. I love poetry and that's my art form. I'm heavily influenced by the poets of the Roma.. more..

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