Great White Waterfall

Tribute to a waterfall.

Like thunder from a thousand horses

your waters cascade there;

such grandeur found in nature's forces

intimidates the air.

With raging fury wrapped in glory

your surging sounds do call;

acclaiming your dynamic story,

a great white waterfall.

Could one imagine such a tower

that nature did construct?

A synergy of falling power

o'er rocky aqueduct!

And jets of lather spewing upward

along your rugged base;

potentiality well averred,

along with rapid grace.

Were you assigned the aeon's niche

for inundation's plan?

Outstretched waters flowing rich

to percolate the land!

And amongst refreshing power,

adroitness to enthrall;

with a steadfast billowing shower

of a great white waterfall.

Reviews

[Moonie]

I love the innovative rhymes. This one paints vivid images on my mind, and the comparisons you used are spectacular. My favourite lines would be
"Like thunder from a thousand horses

your waters cascade there;

such grandeur found in nature's forces

intimidates the air."

[Kieta!]

This is so beautiful!!! I love the descriptive words you used!! Definitely one of my favorites! :) Great job! :) :)

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Richard (my name, too--I go by Rick),

This is a lovely flowing piece with excellent meter (that's probably the most important thing to me in rhyming, metered poetry). So I loved this. Basically 8-6 couplets in 6-line stanzas, with an iambic meter. There are some faults here and there, but the flow caries through. Very nice job.

And the subject is refreshing as only waterfalls can be. So this was greatly enjoyed. You were a fellow entrant into the "Water Poetry" contest, and I must say I enjoyed your 2nd place entry so much more than the 1st place entry. Didn't like that on too much at all. Very novice if you ask me and poorly executed, not at all like your piece.

This was a joy to read, Richard. Very nice.

All my best regards and very high marks.

Rick

[Baz]

Lovely attention to detail on the rhyme and meter. I really like this very much indeed. Well done.

[Desert Dreamer]

I can hear the water crashing down "Like thunder from a thousand horses" and can feel the power of the water. Your poem has great form, rhyme and rhythm and is a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing