Brick

Brick

A Poem by duff
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Steely eyes had me searching

For treasure that never existed

Sighs underwater dreaming blue

I’ll misbehave for you to be free

My lungs filled with tidal waves

I found the turquoise playground

This dream is making me sleepy

I’ll dive deeper if you need clouds

Don’t stir me when you find gold    



© 2020 duff


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The poetry triggered me to want some more clouds. But it's shortness is its beauty.
I really love how the lines made me get lost in its thoughts. It feels like a treasure that does not exist but I happen to dig deeper to find gold.
Beautifully penned.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.



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Opening lines, I did like.
"Steely eyes had me searching
For treasure that never existed"
I enjoyed the honest ride in the poetry. More fool's gold than real. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

1 Week Ago

Thank you Coyote
Nice, I like this. It's different.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Allie!
Allie Brumfield

2 Weeks Ago

You're welcome! :)


Now read through several times and seriously enjoyed on each occasion ..

Neville

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much! I'm pleased you enjoyed it.
Neville

3 Weeks Ago


no worries, no problem, my pleasure..
The most remarkable thing for me is the way you use contrasting imagery that seems almost jarring, it's so "out there", but then it makes sense upon pondering the poem as a whole. It's that frenetic quality one develops when trying to redesign oneself for someone else to take notice. I believe that people who so willingly change themselves to please another, these people-pleasers do not recognize their own incongruities or hypocrisies becuz they never stand back & see their values are ever-changing becuz they are not operating from a core of self-truth. The narrator in your poem feels like he/she is seeking approval from external sources, so he/she is scattered-seeming (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you. Never feeling like you measure to an impossible standard. Spot on.
what an interesting write - I like the visuals - I read it as an unobtainable lover



Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you my friend. It's been awhile.
The poetry triggered me to want some more clouds. But it's shortness is its beauty.
I really love how the lines made me get lost in its thoughts. It feels like a treasure that does not exist but I happen to dig deeper to find gold.
Beautifully penned.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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