Champagne Raincoat

Champagne Raincoat

A Poem by duff
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Broken down time piece

Won't tell me which way

To go to solve the issue

This feeling is killing me

The pleasure trust fund

Motives puzzle me easy

Sweet tooth baby calling

The lost satellite stalling

With our love once again

These cut up lines a fine

Dust yourself off my dear

Green eyes have no fear

Of a champagne raincoat


© 2020 duff


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I love the way this storyline feels like a winding river that winds back on itself, like each curve is connected, but going in a very different direction. You have crafted some butt-kicking ideas here, not only a sign of your writing skill, but especially a sign of your intellect . . . "pleasure trust fund" . . . "Sweet tooth baby" . . . "Dust yourself off" & of course your off-the-charts title! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Weeks Ago

I really appreciate it Margie



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I love this! It's very nicely written and flows together well.

'Dust yourself off my dear
Green eyes have no fear
Of a champagne raincoat'

I particularly like those lines alot. Keep writing!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much my friend!
When the raincoat comes off...it's slicker...when all that we have as show for that other person becomes a teardrop spent...
the eyes see the real...sooner or later.
and we need to be accepted for who we are.
brilliant metaphorical piece here, duff.
I got pleasantly lost within it.
j.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you Jacob
I love the way this storyline feels like a winding river that winds back on itself, like each curve is connected, but going in a very different direction. You have crafted some butt-kicking ideas here, not only a sign of your writing skill, but especially a sign of your intellect . . . "pleasure trust fund" . . . "Sweet tooth baby" . . . "Dust yourself off" & of course your off-the-charts title! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Weeks Ago

I really appreciate it Margie

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Added on September 14, 2020
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