Emerald Avenue

The birds soar mending blue

Wave as she walks that nose

Bermuda lawn emerald view

Her trophy sheer stiletto pose

Mercedes black shining neat

Champagne pseudo socialite

Hello darling bought the teeth

Beluga cracker posh appetite

The boring czar a foolish ally

His warm bath razor solution    

Yellow tape for neighbors eye

Interment her plotted evolution

 

 

Reviews

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

The embellishments of a lavished lifestyle. I felt the ambiance of the fine wealth while enjoying the day hearing the birds chirping away as you breath in and out. Loved the last part "Yellow tape for neighbors eye
Interment her plotted evolution." Speaks of burial here and caution tape for innocent by-standers. I know you have a intended meaning but got something different. Keep writing sincerely your friend in writing and life

[duff]

Thank you Andrew! I truly appreciate it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This could be the opening for a great story. Very strong piece. Great writing.

[duff]

Thank you Cherrie

[barleygirl]

I just read a poem of yours that harkened to my reverse snobbery & this one does also. In California, where the rain rarely supplies our many millions with all the water we need, it's a kind of a distasteful symbol of wealth to keep a sparkling swimming pool filled or to water a lawn every morning just so the hired gardener can blow some fuel & exhaust from the mower twice a week. Your title here harkens to such an abuse of "greenness." Those who use our precious drops to green up their wealthy spreads are the same ones who want to let our forests & oceans be pillaged by the relentless harvesters. Pardon my green jadedness . . . your words bring it out in me! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[duff]

Thank you Margie. Always enjoy your take

[Neville]

That's one helluva woman .. I'm gonna reserve judgement until all the votes are counted in and a re-count has been agreed ... thoroughly enjoyed my friend and no kiddin ...........

[duff]

Thank you my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is a murder scene, figuratively. She is a woman lavished with gifts and showered with wealth and status.
But when he no longer sees her as his eye candy....he lets her go...and she becomes once again what she was before...just average in her own eyes...she doesn't see her own value without him.
a very sad piece, nice metaphor at the end.

I am sorry I walked around the yellow tape...but I just felt like I wanted to comfort her, and see if
her situation brought back her humility.
j.

[duff]

Twisted intentions. Thank you Jacob.