Scattered Blonde

Scattered Blonde

A Poem by duff
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I touched her face so now I must die

Domicile temple breath minus a spy

Thrills don't spill on woven goodbyes

She believed I enjoyed the nosebleed

For inamorata I deployed a rose team

Silver lining blackened a green screen

In retrospect the beautiful was suspect

Love was special effects with an index

The cards tender could not mend her

 

 

© 2021 duff


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Inamorata is a great word - there's something kind of magic about discovering little gems like that.

If it were me, I'd be pretty tempted to try to fit 'stigmata' somewhere in your rhyme scheme, though that's just a thought and it might be difficult to do.

Enjoyed this, though, romance can take appearances sometimes and it isn't always pleasant when the layers start to get pulled back.

Thanks for sharing,

-Ook

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

1 Month Ago

Thank you Ook



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Inamorata is a great word - there's something kind of magic about discovering little gems like that.

If it were me, I'd be pretty tempted to try to fit 'stigmata' somewhere in your rhyme scheme, though that's just a thought and it might be difficult to do.

Enjoyed this, though, romance can take appearances sometimes and it isn't always pleasant when the layers start to get pulled back.

Thanks for sharing,

-Ook

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

1 Month Ago

Thank you Ook
A dangerous liason by the sounds of it duff. A case of look but don't touch. We'll penned says I.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


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duff

1 Month Ago

Red light ladies Chris. Thank you
So you never read the big print. Look don't touch.
Some women should be in museums in marble form.
Now roses, they know someone is going to touch them, that's why they surround themselves with thorns. I still think you have to try though.

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duff

1 Month Ago

Amsterdam Paul. Well, old Amsterdam. Cheers.
Paul Bell

1 Month Ago

The good old days. lol
I had an ex like this...but for me she was a Suicide Blond.....

and I died all those years ago...great use of slant rhyme in this piece.
j.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

1 Month Ago

Haha! I love that Jacob

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