Haiku #2

Haiku #2

A Poem by Lee Bakes
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Something sensory

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A clothesline unfurls:
Pastel shades against grey skies;
Upon a cliff’s edge.

© 2016 Lee Bakes


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I had to read this a few times to 'get the picture' And, if I am right, you have written a very clever Haiku.

I see the clothes line as the edge of the cliff, the pastel clothes are hanging on the 'edge', and the grey skies beyond? Well, to me , that is the 'future' waiting to be coloured, as long as the clothes don't fall over the cliff! To me, that is a wonderful way of putting something very universal!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lee Bakes

5 Years Ago

I have to say though that you've made a very interesting comment here and it does make a point. than.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

5 Years Ago

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I had to read this a few times to 'get the picture' And, if I am right, you have written a very clever Haiku.

I see the clothes line as the edge of the cliff, the pastel clothes are hanging on the 'edge', and the grey skies beyond? Well, to me , that is the 'future' waiting to be coloured, as long as the clothes don't fall over the cliff! To me, that is a wonderful way of putting something very universal!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lee Bakes

5 Years Ago

I have to say though that you've made a very interesting comment here and it does make a point. than.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

5 Years Ago

:].......................................
Hi Lee, in a few short words you have caught something indefinable that communicates more than the sum of the words. I remember seeing a painting by Goya of a part of a dog showing behind a earth bank. (I think from his dark period which may be significant). The painting is of nothing but somehow it seems to encapsulate everything. I can't explain why but your little poem reminded me of this.
Thanks,
Alan

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lee Bakes

7 Years Ago

As always alan you are so perceptive! I am grateful to have someone as talented as you read my stuff.. read more
Adding the description of the skies being grey makes me imagine more about the poem. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lee Bakes

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading B-Law. You're right, that is why i added the color grey to the poem!

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Added on April 8, 2016
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Lee Bakes
Lee Bakes

India



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Hello! I'm Lee! As a kid i loved writing creative writing essays at school and egged on by my kind and exemplary teachers I started writing in my free time and never stopped. My imagination is my hom.. more..

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