Cigarettes

this is one of those tricky poems. If you figure it out then write it in the review... it has a secret meaning i hope you pick up on that

 

Cigarettes

 

I see cigarettes walking around the block

The 72’s short and sturdy with confidence

The menthols, paper loose hanging low 

Always ready to give you that minty but satisfying taste

Light 100’s annoying

Always stay around way to long

Putting them out however is a sin

Which results in poor judgment

 

There is always that one cigarette

That spews more arsenic and rat poisoning

Then most nicotine sticks

Wrapped in a nice silver and green box

Until you open the cardboard

And realize you got your self into something

That was just for the flashy packaging

 

A perfect cigarette white the whole way across

The filling perfect in the most slender kind of way

The tobacco just absolutely satisfying

Mentally physically and spiritually

A parliament light if I want to get

Politically correct

The recessed filter hides the shame inside

Finding the perfect cigarette you bust out the

Bic motorcycle lighter.

In an endless addiction you try to

Flame up your f*g

But for some UN godly reason

It refuses to join you in harmony

In a madness of rage you accidentally snap

Your parliament in your hand

Leaving you unsatisfied and miserable! 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

hollllla at your boy

Reviews

[Nik Dendera]

Christ, you've made me want a f*g and I haven't smoked for 9 months!! Bah!

Great piece, though.
"Wrapped in a nice silver and green box Until you open the cardboard And realize you got your self into something That was just for the flashy packaging" I loved that part! Reminds me of a nasty brand I used to smoke...

As for the hidden meaning... I kind of have an idea, but I'm probably wrong! I usually am! My own interpretation is normally way off centre.

But, like I said, this was a great piece!

[Jaffa Forbes]

interesting piece, I think it can be interpreted in many different ways. like the randomness :)
good write
jaff

[Jeremiah Medina]

Damn i think i need a smoke now. The twist, the cigarette breaking in the end all that wanting and not enjoying that smoke thats interesting. Its an Interesting idea and an interesting poem. Nice write.

[Poeticpiers]

I loved the wry humour young sir I am a hardened smoker of more than sixty years without any ill effect
But I can recall occasions when my last cigarette before pay day either was full of tobacco stems and woul not smoke or I snapped it. The sheer frustration made me use language I would not normally use

[Lucky Me]

Ha right there w/ Dawn!!!! I wanted one too! I haven't smoked in forever too, although I liked your style here. you understand the stupidity behind smoking yet capture the beauty of addiction as well. Nice.

[Blake Q Hatfield]

Interesting take on cigarettes.

[*** Hey Jude***]

Loving the methaphors you have used to describe feelings. This is written so well, I love the comparisons you make, this made me :-)! ~ Jude

[Maynard Winter]

I figured it was something you can never have, like satisfaction? I'm probably wrong.

Thanks for your review of my work. I was dealing with stuff, nothing mid-life (too young) but, yeah.

[Stephanie Allen]

I got the sense that this was talking about people, relationships, or something of the sort, or at least that was how I read it. Regardless, it was another good poem, and I thought it was a good metaphor for people even if that wasn't what you were going for. ;)

[Blackbirdsong]

It would seem that you are using the metaphor of various cigarettes to describe women and their various flavors and flaws...an interesting take on the dating scene and quite well written too. :)

[Robert Luna]

Ok I read this as each Cigarette represents a different person in your life. Based on the types of cigarettes they smoke is how you identify them and the one you feel is perfect for you is the one that is broken and gone so you can not enjoy their company any longer. But that is just my take on this.

Really enjoyed it and made me want to go smoke one. Oh hell now I have said I will have to go do it. LOL

Great Read.