Saturn

Saturn

A Poem by thecoolone52
"

i was trying write a song but i wrote a poem instead

"

 

Saturn
 
Peering inside the telescope
A hidden treasure in space
A planet next to the moon
Without a smile on his face
 
Saturn with a hidden note inside
Taking a detour across
The gloomy skies
Apollo 13 has nothing on me
Showing off his jewelry
To the universe he sings
 
A lane around the top
With a ring on his finger
Grinning with gray holes
in the middle
Mystery aligns with the stars above
Wondering if this planet has people like us
 

© 2008 thecoolone52


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great poem, very musical, talks about technology, rockets, sci-fi, aliens, etc.
well structured.
good job
chord0

Posted 12 Years Ago


saturn. what a coooooooool guy! i love the depth of intrigue and the personality in this poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Interesting one! I often stare at the sky at night and wonder what goes on the the stars and the planets! And Saturn is particularly beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really like this poem because Saturn happens to be my favorite planet. Overall, it's pretty neat.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this poem it is exotic in its mysterious way!


Posted 13 Years Ago


I really like this poem.. it is mysterious and i love the stars and planets.. very well written.

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 13 Years Ago


I liked this poem. Astronomy like poetry looks for hidden beauty.

Posted 13 Years Ago


i freakin loved it...are you an amateur astronomer too?

Posted 13 Years Ago


i was always facinated by planets and the solar system. i really liked the imagery you paint for your readers. i think you can still turn it into a song if you wanted to.

peace,
d

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful imagery, the conclusion - a familiar feeling, often we wonder 'what's out there', but you've summed up Saturn beautifully. Love the wording, particularly 'mystery aligns with the stars above'.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I like to write fiction. It has to be bizzare and orginal or its basically worthless to me. Cause if you write what someone else wrote then whats the point of writing at all? My gramar blows big donke.. more..

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