(hakiu) Stealing a phrase

(hakiu) Stealing a phrase

A Poem by thecoolone52
"

i was smoking a cig outside and i came up with this one

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Stealing a Phrase

 

I jumped off a bridge

everyone else

Jumped too

© 2008 thecoolone52


Author's Note

thecoolone52
so dumb but i think it kinda lets your mind wonder a little bit....... thats what i was trying to do....... and i saw this pic and its soooooooo rediclous i had to put it on........... its from the boston Hearld but i wrote this before i saw the pic........

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Such a trend setta, obviously. You should write more so I can read it. KTHX

But yeah, this is interesting, it's not a conventional haiku, but whatev, you make your own rules. I like the idea, of course, that whole "If she jumped off a bridge would you?" that parents berate their children with when they begin to conform. After all, either you follow trends or set them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think I am ADHD so reading this was awesome! I liked it, not dumb at all bud. Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


lol i love it .. my mom always used the saying ' if everyone jumped off a bridge would you' I had to think before i answered ...well i guess people do jump with everyone else.. lol mind id wondering and wandering.. lol

Chloe

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a trend setta, obviously. You should write more so I can read it. KTHX

But yeah, this is interesting, it's not a conventional haiku, but whatev, you make your own rules. I like the idea, of course, that whole "If she jumped off a bridge would you?" that parents berate their children with when they begin to conform. After all, either you follow trends or set them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Usually a haiku has 5-7-5 syllables, but from what I read that is not an absolute. Can appreciate the different twist you put to a saying often heard. Yes, it does make you think.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Are you sure you have the proper amount of syllables in each line? It seems a bit different than other I have read and I am no expert on this type verse..God bless..Valentine

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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