More Than A Shoulder

More Than A Shoulder

A Poem by Andrea Greene

Hopefully this shall alleviate the pain of waiting. Forever for you is forever and a day for me. Also, I never intend to flatter. Sorry that the title is senseless.

I've tried my hand at illustrating many beautiful things,
But there was no challenge in that.
Most things were simple, self-explanatory.
Now I face my own desire to illustrate something- someone- 
Not only of heart-stopping, breathtaking, speechless-silence-inducing beauty,
But so multifaceted and indescribable and easy to fall in love with
That there is no perfect place to begin, and no perfect place to end. 
He is earnest, and he is thoughtful. 
He is just as selfless as he is stubborn, sometimes. 
He is many unexpected things, at unexpected times, in unexpected ways.
His way with words is weaponry,
Charm twists to compliment twists to dry humor
In one seamless phrase.
He's got a flair for the dramatic,
Which is assisted greatly by his lively, sunlit eyes
That no one metaphor can ever entirely define.
I still feel that words, especially mine, can never do him justice,
Which maddens me to no end, because
He is the sort of person that the purest, most perfect poetry is written about.
It astounds me, sometimes, that every person on this Earth
Has not fallen hopelessly in love with him.

© 2018 Andrea Greene

Author's Note

Andrea Greene
I am compensating for the not-yet-experienced love of 7 billion people that he deserves. Maybe that explains why I'm so fatigued. Anyways, comments and reviews are much appreciated, any criticism shall be noted and acted upon accordingly.

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This is wonderfully romantic. I enjoyed it very much.

Posted 2 Years Ago

This is one of the best tributes I've ever read to honor a friend. The best aspect is the way you paint a realistic balanced picture of someone with mostly good points, but also some a little rough, as well. The first half of your poem is filled with generalities (multi-faceted, indescribable) & many are well-chosen, but do not really impart the true essence of an individual. It's more like you're describing how he makes you feel, more than what he's actually like. Then you get to V4, which is a vividly detailed description of what it's like to be around him & this is what I crave more of in your writing. SHOW instead of tell. This is a great poem & I'm not suggesting you dig into it. Just keep in mind for future writing (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago

Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I liked how you led the reader to the worthwhile ending. You made the reader think and left them with some questions. Thank you Andrea for sharing the amazing poetry.

Posted 5 Years Ago

You know - you r post is ' multifaceted '... is a tale within a tale, an endearing and adoring biog, a slow, seductive lead up to those two final wonderful ph rases!

As a Green to a G reene: brava!

Posted 5 Years Ago

THIS was more than worth the pause to listen... if it is REAL - not Memorex - woman you have it GOOD! And me even pausing to consider the possibility recognizes the effectiveness of your depiction.

Posted 5 Years Ago

Andrea Greene

5 Years Ago

I have it very, very good indeed. And thank you very much for your thoughtfulness!

5 Years Ago

You're welcome

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5 Reviews
Added on July 11, 2018
Last Updated on July 11, 2018
Tags: i'm conflicted, seeing as, it seems, excessive, and yet, not publishing, this, I fear, is an, injustice


Andrea Greene
Andrea Greene


Love is blind. I still fall for it every time, though, so it's certainly got sosething over me. more..


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