as well she knows

I

 

At the peak of a mountain I throw blossoms down to her that I love.

She stood close to me once and I smelled a garden in her hair.

When the river receives her blooms

This loneliness will I ever know.

 

II

 

I will always almost have her eyes

Nearly kissing them in the single place

Where there is everything that I love.

 

In the near-ness where she is looking elsewhere

She is the only that I know most

And she can barely love me like I can only love her all.

 

III

 

Love without her is a hole remaining.

Her lips know an endless dance

as smooth stones beneath a babbling brook

when they entangle mine.

Her lips berth madness, all else fleeting.

I return desire deepening

when I move from them.

 

IV

 

She wants no more

Before I have given her much at all.

That which not worth mentioning

More close to nothing,

 

Such pearls everlasting

Fall still between cracks in the floor,

Stop deaf being never heard.

 

If she a world away then only closer in a wish,

But anything that I can say will never even come to this.

 

Should she part with just a knowing,

One thing if that I might enlighten,

Tell her once, the love is always hers,

 

Should she a world away,

A million years but still like light,

As slow as fast can travel,

Send I my love across the galaxy,

Should I think her ear has tilted to receive.

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

The title , the poem and the form are all wonderful.


"Love without her is a hole remaining.

Her lips know an endless dance

as smooth stones beneath a babbling brook

when they entangle mine.

Her lips berth madness, all else fleeting.

I return desire deepening

when I move from them."

[m.s.early]

After respectfully reading your work I take this deeply. Thank you so kindly for the encouragement.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure ...Any time...:).......................

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I have not withheld my promise....here I am getting inspired by your beautiful thoughts :) Thanks x!

[Kathy Van Kurin]

m.s.early,
"as well she knows"
The depth, width of your emotional-dedication, memory is seen. The poem's contrast of a mountain to it's ending with a universe really gives the theme of love which will not be denied. The loved one is so precious; gone though she may be. This is its immense beauty.
It brought tears to my heart this one did.
"At the peak of the mountain I throw blossoms down to her that I love. She stood close to me once and I smelled a garden in her hair. When the river receives her blooms this loneliness will I ever know. (The stage is set.) It's reality now plays out emotion for emotion to the ending place of eternity love's reality. "Should she a world away, a million years but still like light, as slow as fast can travel, send I my love across the galaxy, should I think her ear has tilted to receive." How precious and spacious this feels!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

A woman who is securely wrapped in her lover's words shall be filled with a knowing that can't be torn or ripped from the universe. We often become so emmeresed in our own need that we forget to regularly tend that bond. This is a magnificent piece of strength and knowing!. You are the wind wrapping love around eternal!

[lost girl]

This has more yearning and more love than any could ever wish for. Look, you have sent it out from the mountain and the winds have brought it back up again. This is going into that place...where I keep words that have meaning. (They say I can't give a million kudos, so I'll just come back that many times to read it again and again.)

[Wuji]

I felt this to my core, amazing write, won one of the hardest contests I've had the luxury to judge.

[Riding the Rainbow]

really really good...I really felt every word

[m.s.early]

(: thank you very much for reading :)

[Ruth]

The visuals to this are just sublime. It left me aching and needing...now, that is a good poem lol x

[B.J]

Such beautiful work. I loved the way you chose to use the last stanza. Beautiful