Candles and ashes

Candles and ashes

A Poem by Poetic_Vixen
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For the givers of love and those who live its legacy.

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The candle softly melted
at its flame's gentle sway;
somewhere
the matchstick lies,
ashen
with the last of its smoke swirls
still tasting of fire it licked
that doused it whole.

Oh, love of scented seconds
filling the room,
its borrowed love
taking over each of its nooks,
carrying more of its warmth,

some of us burn for love
while most of us
burn till the last of it.

© 2024 Poetic_Vixen


Author's Note

Poetic_Vixen
Some very keep observations there. Better than overthinking anyway hah!

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A beautiful analogy of the candle and matchstick, both burning for live in their own unique ways. I loved the vivid imagery of the softly burning candle at the behest of its gently swaying flame and the matchstick that licked fire, to set alight the flame. You have such a fabulously creative mind! Reading your words makes me feel that we all leave our own, special legacy of love. Another great and very memorable poem from you, dear Muskaan.
💐🙋‍♀️❤️

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

I was living each of the experience of the matchstick that was burned to light a flame to lend it to.. read more
DIVYA

1 Month Ago

As I said before, your use of imagery is unique and delightful. It just convinces me about poets be.. read more
Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

I wonder and sorta believe I got still lengths to go to reach this huge title of 'being born a poet'.. read more



Reviews

A wonderful poem for the dance of love dear poet.
"Oh, love of scented seconds
filling the room,
its borrowed love
taking over each of its nooks,
carrying more of its warmth,"
I adored the above lines. In life we shall learn. Sometimes we loan and borrow kisses. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

4 Weeks Ago

Grateful for this insightful review fellow poet! Glad you enjoyed reading!
Coyote Poetry

3 Weeks Ago

I did enjoy. A wonderful poem dear poet.
I love how the poetess opens the poem with the matchstick giving up its life in order to give life to the candle through lighting it. The visual detail in the poem is very impressive as the poetess flecks the most amazing pictures for her reader through excellent word choice. Like the little matchstick most of us burn for love right to the very end. Beautiful poem, dear P.V. I love the title too, it drew me in to read it, as I also love candles and had just blown my two lighting since early morning, out before reading. Lovely work! Thank you for sharing, dear poetess...

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie

1 Month Ago

Most welcome always, dear P.V. Though in prose, your reply is as poetic as your beautiful poem. You .. read more
Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

Ah! That just made me smile! I can't be grateful enough my friend!
Marie

1 Month Ago

Bless you, dear P.V. and thank you again for sharing...
Tremendous imagery. You make this come to life.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

So grateful for this!
A beautiful analogy of the candle and matchstick, both burning for live in their own unique ways. I loved the vivid imagery of the softly burning candle at the behest of its gently swaying flame and the matchstick that licked fire, to set alight the flame. You have such a fabulously creative mind! Reading your words makes me feel that we all leave our own, special legacy of love. Another great and very memorable poem from you, dear Muskaan.
💐🙋‍♀️❤️

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

I was living each of the experience of the matchstick that was burned to light a flame to lend it to.. read more
DIVYA

1 Month Ago

As I said before, your use of imagery is unique and delightful. It just convinces me about poets be.. read more
Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

I wonder and sorta believe I got still lengths to go to reach this huge title of 'being born a poet'.. read more
Ah what a refreshing read - I'm reminded of a smudging, and am left with a pleasant sense of incense and smoke.

You've done an incredible job with theme here, and the notion that the brightest fires burn fastest certainly comes to mind. Very well done.

Though it might be a bit pedantic, there are some spots in the final two lines of the first stanza that bug me a bit. The metering catches me for some reason, but I can't put a thumb down as to why. Anyways, offered here just as suggestion:

"...still tasting of *the* fire it licked
*that'd* doused *its length* whole."

Regardless, really lovely work here - hoping this review is received constructively.

-Ook

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

It means a lot. And I welcome these constructive suggestions, gives one new ways to interpret though.. read more
Ookpik

1 Month Ago

That's my view too, still, writers can be sensitive and I find its better to preface then to unneces.. read more
Poetic_Vixen

1 Month Ago

Very happy to know! Sending you warmth ❤️

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Added on May 28, 2024
Last Updated on May 28, 2024
Tags: Poetry, love, heart, relationships, night, romantic

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I'm an ardent lover hidden within the deep confines of my maturity, a lover of poetry and expressing deep meanings in the most mundane observations. Clearing out the mist crowding my soul and peekin.. more..

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