Why Daddy

Why Daddy

A Poem by The Realist
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i was never daddy's little girl although i never hated him for that, the more he pushed me away the more i was drawn to him, the more i craved for his fatherly love, but still i wait here patiently to

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Daddy why don't you love me?
Is it because i look more of 'her'?
Is it because i am a reminder of what has gone and will never return?
Everyday i see a father hold his daughter dearly, 
With so much affection and love,
And then i look at us.
Is there even an 'us' anymore?
Was there ever an 'us' to begin with?
Why daddy why?
Why must you push me away?
Cant you see daddy? i'm hurting too,
I smile for the sake of you, reminding you that i'm here,
That i'm here to share your grief with and morn over our lost,
But why daddy why?
Why must you scorn at me with such raw hate?
Cant you see daddy our numbers will never add up
You lost one.....................................
But I've lost two.


© 2016 The Realist


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I am sorry and hope that the relationship between you and your father reconnect soon. Me and my dad had our differences but i still love my father dearly. Although now we are not in the best speaking terms. I will always respect him because no matter what he will always be my father.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 The Realist

5 Years Ago

dont be, its not your fault, cherish what you have with your father even on bad terms, believe me.



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I am sorry and hope that the relationship between you and your father reconnect soon. Me and my dad had our differences but i still love my father dearly. Although now we are not in the best speaking terms. I will always respect him because no matter what he will always be my father.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 The Realist

5 Years Ago

dont be, its not your fault, cherish what you have with your father even on bad terms, believe me.
this is so sad..especially the line ''our numbers will never add up, you lost one but i lost two..'...so real for so many that are also experiencing this. i don't understand how a parent can act like this..its alien to me. i hope you and your dad manage to find that bond and make this a thing of the passt fofr you both. well done on this heatfelt, open piece of poetry

Posted 5 Years Ago


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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

That was the one line that broke me the most..... and im glad that my experience is 'alien like' to .. read more
hcarson

5 Years Ago

Maybe write him a letter, saying exactly how you feel...maybe it will break through to him?....i rea.. read more
 The Realist

5 Years Ago

A letter?? Words mean nothing to him, well coming from me will only go through one ear to the other,.. read more
amazingly written keep it up :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

Thank you:)
Urja Gokani

5 Years Ago

welcome :)
Are the typos intentional, to make it seem more like a letter written by a child to their Daddy? It definitely adds to the feeling of innocence and is more in sync with the narrator's tone.

I felt that the level of maturity fluctuates, with it starting out more child-like, and becoming progressively more mature and even philosophical. Also, it makes me wonder what era the child and father are from. Feels more 20th century, since a child won't easily use words like "must" in "Why must you push me away" or "grief" in "share your grief".

I like the poetic touch in the last two lines especially. I feel that this poem can be greatly improved with a few edits, though as always, it's really up to you how you want to do it.

Very emotive and a strong sense of backstory. I like it.

Good luck and keep writing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 The Realist

5 Years Ago

yeah, they were intentional, its in a child-like voice at first showing her innocence, then takes a .. read more
Great write here, and so true of some relationships today. I hope it's not autobiographical. This would translate well into spoken word art.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 The Realist

5 Years Ago

Im grateful for your review J Todd Underhill :) really i am, but in all honesty this poem is me. hen.. read more
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mou
It is painful and a pathetic demand only to get love up to a limit that heart wants.
Pain is pronounced but love crosses it more.
A sentimental write!
Thanks for sharing.

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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

No thank you mou, for reading my work and for reviewing it too :)
Powerful, honest and direct words. I felt the struggle leading to the sad ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 The Realist

5 Years Ago

No i thank you for taking the time to read my poems.
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
This touches deep ... this rings true .. in just a few lines, we feel your emotions... your heart ..
and your loss..

Well done..

Jazzy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jazzy that means alot.
J. J.  Nightingale

5 Years Ago

You are welcome......and... Welcome to the Cafe.....J.
Coping with loss is real... and while many understand - the dealing isn't easier. You gave a good depiction... and the hurt-full aftermath.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

yes, loss is a dreadful thing but having to deal with the pain alone is almost unbearable.
This is heart-wrenching to read. You bring out the questions in this girl's heart with a sad innocence with your words. The ending is a kick in the gut. Just my opinion but for a long time I have thought that society hasn't a clue of the importance of a father or father figure in a girl's life. She will use this yardstick to measure the men in her life and if she has no measuring stick, the results are usually chaos, drama and looking for love in all the wrong places.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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 The Realist

5 Years Ago

Very true indeed. ive never been daddys' little girl, so i know how it feels to have a father, but i.. read more
Barbara Walker

5 Years Ago

yes. I have to post 10 characters
 The Realist

5 Years Ago

Lol yeah i noticed that..... :)

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