Try and care

These are all the things I secertly want to tell my sister

You think because I try I’m stupid,

Every time I succeed at something you say it’s nothing,

You say people like me better than you,

And that no one cares about your problems,

You say no one cares about your achievements,

That no one cares if you die,

We do care but,

If you don’t care about others how can we care about you,

Author's Note

Terrible grammar, please tell me what you think and phoebe if you read this don't get angry

Reviews

[Hibiki]

Congratulation for your winning on the contest!

"We do care but,

If you don’t care about others how can we care about you,"

Very true and I like this sentences..

Well done~ ^^

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

I like the sentiment and the verse is free and flowing. A good poem, WW! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

A sister is like a half of your life. Her failures are yours, too. Her successes are yours. too. Just let her feel that you care for her. And if she still think that she is being neglected, don't stop loving her until she feel she is being loved.

[Weeping Willow]

done and still doing she hates when i try and give her something or try and hug her

[Bluefire]

Very good, and so true. Well done! ^^

[deepblue04]

This would be amazing to tell someone that's suicidal...

[Steven Cash]

So chill

Big up

[PurpleQuartz]

So true.
A good meaningful poem.
-Purplequartz

[Castonovia]

Soooo, true if you don't first offer some emotion, some form of caring to somebody else no one can return the love... the caring :) Very touching!!!

[Hester Vane]

I think this is a heartfelt piece that is well meant. If your sister does read this she shouldnt be angry she should be greatful that you care so much. You can easily tweek the grammer and then it will be perfect.

[Weeping Willow]

thank you

[RachelReaper]

I suggest slapping her in the face or just flat our kicking her a*s the next time she says this and saying, "Yeah? and what makes you any better than me?" This got me riled... because its not true. WE care.

[Weeping Willow]

I wish i could go and punch her or something, but she's stronger and would end up kicking my a*s. So thats why I wrote this to tell her what I think about her selfishness.

[RachelReaper]

or you could just find really embarrassing pages out of her diary and make copies of them and tape them all over the school walls... just a thought...

[Weeping Willow]

she doesn't have a dairy :(
why is phoebe smarter then me?

[RachelReaper]

she's not, just find ways that she wouldn't think of. Play dirty.