Try and care

Try and care

A Poem by Weeping Willow
"

These are all the things I secertly want to tell my sister

"

You think because I try I’m stupid,

Every time I succeed at something you say it’s nothing,

You say people like me better than you,

And that no one cares about your problems,

You say no one cares about your achievements,

That no one cares if you die,

We do care but,

If you don’t care about others how can we care about you,

© 2012 Weeping Willow


Author's Note

Weeping Willow
Terrible grammar, please tell me what you think and phoebe if you read this don't get angry

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Congratulation for your winning on the contest!

"We do care but,

If you don’t care about others how can we care about you,"

Very true and I like this sentences..

Well done~ ^^


Posted 5 Years Ago


I like the sentiment and the verse is free and flowing. A good poem, WW! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


A sister is like a half of your life. Her failures are yours, too. Her successes are yours. too. Just let her feel that you care for her. And if she still think that she is being neglected, don't stop loving her until she feel she is being loved.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Weeping Willow

6 Years Ago

done and still doing she hates when i try and give her something or try and hug her
Very good, and so true. Well done! ^^

Posted 7 Years Ago


This would be amazing to tell someone that's suicidal...

Posted 7 Years Ago


So chill

Big up

Posted 7 Years Ago


So true.
A good meaningful poem.
-Purplequartz

Posted 7 Years Ago


Soooo, true if you don't first offer some emotion, some form of caring to somebody else no one can return the love... the caring :) Very touching!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I think this is a heartfelt piece that is well meant. If your sister does read this she shouldnt be angry she should be greatful that you care so much. You can easily tweek the grammer and then it will be perfect.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Weeping Willow

7 Years Ago

thank you
I suggest slapping her in the face or just flat our kicking her a*s the next time she says this and saying, "Yeah? and what makes you any better than me?" This got me riled... because its not true. WE care.

Posted 7 Years Ago


RachelReaper

7 Years Ago

or you could just find really embarrassing pages out of her diary and make copies of them and tape t.. read more
Weeping Willow

7 Years Ago

she doesn't have a dairy :(
why is phoebe smarter then me?
RachelReaper

7 Years Ago

she's not, just find ways that she wouldn't think of. Play dirty.

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Weeping Willow

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My name is Weeping Willow I am a girl, and I love to write. I’m not always good and usually get bored of something easily. I’m a little weird and far out when it comes to stories. Even th.. more..

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