Distance

Distant souls on fire,
Hands reaching higher
For another to hold,
For a way to grow,
Fingers entwined;
No time to pine,
Spirits fading fast,
Hoping love will last;
Slow beats of the heart
Quicken when far apart,
Cannot stand to be away,
Do not want to stray-
But what is one to do
When forgetting how to say
I love you?

Reviews

[Bradford Corvi]

For better or worse, distance always seemed to affect relationships and you've captured it beautifully.

[Acer]

Slow beats of the heart
Quicken when far apart,
Cannot stand to be away,
Do not want to stray-......

nice lines, liked it indeed. very lovely written.

[Sarah Marie]

Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed this, and I appreciate your review!

[Acer]

Your welcome :*)

[Jack...]

Distance is always a problem in a relationship, but forgetting how to say i love you is so very damaging. I like this and think simplistic is fine.

[Trigorin]

Not bad, but it does come across as a little simplistic, which isn't a bad thing in and of itself, but I just feel like you could do a great deal better, given your control of language and the concept you're working with. It's not bad but it's not really great either, I feel, and I just think you could do much better.

[Sarah Marie]

Thanks for you feedback!

[The 13th Eros]

There's such a tension that builds in your words. The short phrases seem to stab at the mind with overwhelming thoughts of passion as well as pain. May love last; please may it last.

[Sarah Marie]

I am glad you like this! Thanks again for your reviews.

[The 13th Eros]

Thank you for sharing your heart and mind!